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(A great chapter) I'm loving this, although I do feel like you're moving along rather quickly here. This chapter gave me some feels, but they could've been much more powerful feels if there had been some... buildup(?) beforehand. Implying I have room to talk. Keep up the good work. I'm looking forw...

LorSquirrel wrote:

Silentcook wrote:Literacy determines whether or not you are able to read and write. If you are illiterate, you can't. If you're literate, you can.

You probably meant literature, which deals with written works.

Thanks for the clarifcation, Cook.

>replying nearly two months later

Dude, wut.

So, in the above quote, why is dialogue between the main characters unimportant? I'm not saying that every single conversation needs to be presented in full, but we're at the beginning of story where we're only getting to know the heroine. That "idle chit chat", or at least significant ch...

Not entirely sure why; but I hesitate to read this after having read Rikabro's route... After reading the Rika route and all the feedback it got, I was hesitant to keep writing this. How could I ever live up to this? I thought. I'm not sure if I can, but with this forum as my witness, I'll finish w...

Nice chapter. Towards the end a couple of typos or misplaced commas slipped in - especially in the fireworks paragraph. Drop me a PM if you need any help finding them. Thanks. I do get a bit trigger happy with the comma key. Aside from those niggling spelling and grammar issues Mirage mentioned, th...

--------------------------------------------------------------------------- Scene III: Shock --------------------------------------------------------------------------- I wander outside, taking in this fine Sunday morning. The air is laced with the smell of freshly cut grass, and the mixed aroma of ...

And the prodigal son hath returned! Huzzah!

I'm really loving this story, so far. Keep it up, man.

(Lot's of good criticism) At first glance, your post was a bit overwhelming. I was thinking, oh geez I goofed, but after reading it I realized that most of it could've been avoided if I would proofread a little more thoroughly. There are people at this school born with disabilities, and others like...

--------------------------------------------------------------------------- Scene II: Clear --------------------------------------------------------------------------- I conquer the last few steps on my way to the roof for my little lunch get-together with Emi. Acknowledging me with its characterist...

When I read "Rika route" my first reaction was "Oh no, not another one." I believe Mirage is talking about Rikabro's Rika-psuedo route, which finished awhile ago and was fantasically written, however as Mirage also stated she was certainly self-destructive and nihilistic :lol: A...

Walshy12238 wrote:
Out of curiosity, do you have any idea when the next scene will be posted? I actually am pretty interested to read more

If the caffeine prevails, and my willpower remains true to the cause, within the next 2-4 hours. (It's 2 am here though)

Walshy12238 wrote: Well you didn't have to, but it does look better now

I aim to please.

I really enjoyed that, it was great. It wasn't excessively long and got the point across without having to use tonnes of detail. You write well :D The only thing I had a problem with was the way you phrased this sentence: She makes eye contact and nods at him before he releases her. I had to look o...

When I read "Rika route" my first reaction was "Oh no, not another one." It seems you're trying to make her something different than a self-destructive, nihilistic brat, though, so colour me cautiously optimistic :-) Another one? I only found one other one, and it was very rushe...

Oh god, what am I doing? I don't even writing. This cannot end well. --------------------------------------------------------------------------- Oh, look! A table of contents. Act I: Half a Heart ( Act Titlecard ) Scene I: Charge (This post) Hisao meets a fellow patient in the Nurse's office. Scene ...