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Very creepy! I had no idea where you were going with it until the end, so kudos for that. A few suggestions. 1. I would use the word Coffin less. 2. I would omit all the profanity. I don't think Hanako talks or thinks that way. 3. While I like the repeating lines, you might consider making them a li...

I'm not sure if you intended this or not, but Hanako covering her face as Hisao sees her for what she might think is the first time in his memory was really powerful for me. I felt so bad for her. She's come such a long way only to meet Hisao all over again. But, he remembers her. So that feel was s...

Thank you all for the responses.

I look forward to expanding on this.

Meantime, /vg/'s Dubsdraw contributed some artwork to Scene 5 which is at the bottom of the first page & is my avatar. Check it out.

I didn't realize you had extended this longer than the one you posted in /vg/. Glad I got a chance to read the whole thing. I'm sorry I doubted your ability to write something "bittersweet." It is indeed that. The ending is gorgeous. As if Misha weren't tragic enough already. :) Beautiful ...

I love your Rika! She's so unpleasant.

And I think you are doing an excellent job of making Saki unlike any of the other girls. She's really got a unique personality and I love your interpretation of her. Looking forward to future installments.

Scene 6: Fears It’s 3 in the morning, and I’ve found what I think might be the best of all possible study hours. I can’t remember the last time I wasn’t tired at this hour. I woke up at 7:00 PM in the lounge of the girl’s dorm, in the company of Shiina and Shizune who apparently thought it best not...

Sure are a lot of conflicting emotions in here. In a way I guess it's what you'd call a happy ending for Hanako, who after all those years finally gets to be with Hisao. Pains me to think she'd been thirdwheeling for three years after the end of Lilly's route. Lilly's calls tapering off gradually ov...

I don't know anything about concussions. I think you can (if you want to) mess around with the particulars in order to make it more scientifically accurate without losing any of the actual story, though. Obviously this is just a set-up for a longer narrative. Hisao was in some kind of accident and h...

Thanks for all the feedback, you guys. Much appreciated! Edit: While I can imagine her character as the way your portray it, her image in the blog makes her look a bit Hanako-ish :? I can see that. They are certainly both people who tend to be at the fringes of the social milieu at Yamaku. I don't t...

I wrote these over the course of the last few days. Damn. Writing is time consuming. And writing Emi dialogue is hard. I tried to do it while imagining everything she said in the voice of Rikku from FFX. Seems like the proper etiquette in this forum is to continue posting your installments in the sa...

That started out very creepy and ended a lot less creepy.

I liked how the note was proof that it wasn't a dream, but the note bothered to point it out in the "P.S." too. That made me chuckle.

Really interesting story concept & well executed.

Wow, thanks for the responses. I'm really glad it got through to people. My biggest worry in writing is that I don't fully convey the feeling that I'm going for, but I think it came through here. I'm already working on a third part. Scenes of 1000 or so words each, much like my original post. I have...

I nearly teared up at the part where she starts apologizing in advance for her bodily functions and he has to snap her out of it. The whole thing just glows with sincerity and warmth. Gave me a huge smile. I love their rapport and how they kid around with each other. Reminds me a lot of Emi's route....

Lothbrok wrote:Maybe I'm not hardcore enough of a fan but who is Rika.

Sorry. I added the link for clarification. She was a DLC character the Devs conceptualized as an April Fools' joke.

http://katawashoujo.blogspot.com/2011/0 ... plans.html

For those of you who may not know who Rika is, she was a DLC character that was promised by the devs as an April Fools joke. You can read about it here: http://katawashoujo.blogspot.com/2011/04/announcement-future-plans.html Like the in-game routes, it contains mature content, some of it relatively ...