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Les Demoiselles d'Avignon world Rin didn't understand much about the world. But she did understand that there was a lot she didn't understand. When she didn't understand something, she was inclined to imagine an explanation for it instead. That way there would never have to be a gap in her thoughts...

First things first, welcome to the forum! Seems like we have been getting more new faces around here lately, or maybe that's just me. So this is a criticism I have seen leveled at a lot of different fics and have had leveled at myself as well, and while I think one should have a degree of leniency f...

I liked it! This chapter definitely had a characterization that was most like the Rin in canon, for sure, though that doesn't necessarily mean it's the best. It's subjective, I suppose. Your dialogue and internal monologue continue to impress me. And, of course, we all know the struggle of wanting ...

The Son of Man Rin followed two girls out of her dormitory, into the freezing cold. They pressed their sides against each other as though they were conjoined twins, probably trying to keep warm. If either of them were a boy, she might have assumed they were in love, but sometimes girls would huddle...

Okay! Well, there wasn't all that much to this story- being mostly just a fluffy slice-of-life fic, but it was very well-written and that is plenty to make it worth reading in my book. I think you have a very good grasp on Emi as a character and the dialogue was very strong (I was also impressed wit...

Maybe I'm just being dense but it's hard for me to tell whether this is a serious fic based on a meme, an intentional meme fic that isn't meant to be taken seriously, or a troll fic that is meant to make people think it's serious when it isn't. I'm inclined to go with one of the latter two... but if...

Really good chapter. The dialogue between Hisao and Emi is very believable and is shaping up their relationship nicely. You've created a very interesting dynamic between the two of them and Tsu and I'm really curious to see how everything turns out. I'm surprised I didn't leave any comments on this ...

Dance at le Moulin de la Galette Rin's eyes traced over the veiny lines in her ceiling from wall to wall. There wasn't any real beginning or end to them, and they snaked around and intersected too much in the center to tell each individual one apart. Like tiny threads on a giant plaster spider web....

It made me smile. I agree with bry overall, it does go a little overboard. The rampant capitalization particularly. But I've read plenty of fics involving Rin that sounded a lot less like her so it didn't bother me that much. Particularly uncharacteristic in my eyes is that Rin would actually use a ...

I really enjoyed this! And thanks for going out of your way to write for the prompt; I thought it was a shame that it seemed it would never see the light of day. You added a lot of little touches that I thought added atmosphere really well- the way Shizune's speech is all broken up from Lilly's pers...

Really cute one-shot. I really like your narrating style. I thought it was an interesting choice to frame the proposal from Emi's perspective and you managed it quite well.
Well done!

Sorry but I'm just not on board with this. There is nothing that makes this conflict particularly compelling. The other girl in question doesn't need to be Lilly- actually she doesn't need to be anybody in particular at all; the only purpose she serves in this story is to be Hisao's existing girlfri...

... ...Eh. I'm not taken with this fic. I don't know. It's a love triangle! Not exactly the most revolutionary concept in the world is it? It's not that I think it's bad, but I'm just not a fan of the execution here. I'm distracted by the fact that the tension in this story comes from the fact that ...

Annunciation Little snowflakes, sparse in the gray sky, floated to the ground outside the giant rectangular windows of Chishiki's classroom. Every once in a while, one or two rogue flakes got swept up in a gust of wind, and they swerved to the side, right into the window pane. Rin watched as they t...

I strongly disagree that being surprising (or unusual, which is how I would be more inclined to describe it) is something to be praised in and of itself. There is something to be said for originality and keeping the reader on their toes, but this does not mean making the story as weird and edgy as p...