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Well, Mirage caught me trying to play editor again. Back to the basement for another week :< I thought the story has a solid, well thought out premise. However, the execution could use a bit of work. As no more than a beginning writer myself, I think that your introduction could use some TLC further...

This is the scummiest piece of garbage I have ever had the displeasure of reading.

Now my face is sore from smiling. I hate you.

Alright, I'll do some basic screening to get you started. I wouldn't say that it was ''smooth'' because I 'm smart or anything , but because today I was caught trying to skip the class on the gardens, trying to get some sleep on the calm and soft green grass. This sentence has a lot of problems. The...

... She's mostly mentally scarred from the car accident, and after moving to Japan, her father got her to Yamaku to live a quiet life and to finish her studies after everything that happened to her at the hospital... Ah, I see. So it parallels the Hanako route in more ways than one. :D Well, I am i...

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Good for Misha? Wahaha~?

The only thing that irks me is how much of a pansy you make Hisao out to be, but hey you can't please everyone. Isn't it great? That we can have so many Hisaos that we get to pick and choose which ones we like? They can be as passive as a Hanako sequel route character, or as aggressive and sure-foo...

octovaitor wrote:“Luck. Runs. Out.” Yeah this is perfect.

I couldn't hold it in. Burst out laughing, that was hilarious! Did you consider 'Enter Sandman'?

Sperance wrote:Also the 'Hisao almost died count' for this route can begin: 1

Yep. For a moment there, I thought Miki was going to do what Hanako did in 'Bad Hanako' and just leave Hisao to die

Ah, well. Master of Romance lives on... for now. Great chapter, though it was a bit strange. I like strange.

Mirage_GSM wrote:"Emi, I choose you!" and roll credits.

Just got a terrible image in my head of Hisao throwing a pokeball and Emi flashes out of it. Shiver.

Although not entirely accurate, since I'm willing to bet most people read it here. Well, yes. I know for fact that most of my readers probably do so here, largely because this is where I've posted everything first, and the same probably goes for Leaty. Yes. There are a multitude of reasons as to wh...

Also, I think whether or not Emi has now "won" is a product of how one defines "winning". "Heh, I used to be able to say the same thing about Hanako, but it seems like lately that's not true anymore. Every time I'm with her lately, there's this tension in the air, and thing...

Idiot ball is strong with this one. I pull out my phone, almost as an afterthought whilst getting comfortable for the train ride. I know this won't be easy, but at least I don't have to say it in person. I take a deep breath and begin writing. Hey, Hanako. I'm on my way to Tokyo to... to tell Shizu...

Prediction: Hisao goes to Tokyo to 'have a talk' with his 'girlfriend'. He breaks things off with Shizune. He returns to his home University, expecting a waiting Hanako. Nay. Oh she of little faith hath assumed that he was there to spend some time with Shizune instead of her. Mystery guy is now in a...

Unusual euphemism achieved! This is almost as good as the image someone posted of a road sign indicating that they were nearing 'Happy Valley'. Ah, yes. Page 38, if you ever want to see it again. I would understand. Add another one to the tally. Also, by the end of this there should be a leather-bo...

Today, my English teacher used the term 'empirical data'.

Hard not to laugh my ass off. Goddamn it Helbereth.