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kind of a short scene so I might put another one up later if u really want me to thanks We enter and see a young man properly in his twenty's with light purple hair and a white doctors coat on. “Ahhh Emi I see you’ve brought a boy with you could this be the man you were looking for” He says this wit...

The trip to the nurses office was far more entertaining then i ever thought it would be. Emi seems to be far nicer then her introduction said she was, she appartlley is “the fastest thing on no legs” she’ll have to prove that to me one day. She also told me about Hisao and Hanako and what they both ...

First of all I suggest you look for a proofreader. I guess English isn't your native language, and there are too many things to correct to do it all in this thread. Next, try not to have your character experience all the exact same things that happened to Hisao. Try to be more original. Another thi...

Silentcook wrote:You're missing a lot of commas. As a result, your sentences tend to be rather run-on. There are several more general issues with grammar and spelling, but these two are the ones that leapt up at me.

Thank you for the help and I will try to sort it out

The luch bell signals the end of class which is like music to my ears, i pack up my notes and see Hisao talking to Hanako so i deciede to head over. “Hey Hisao and its a pleasure to meet you Hanako.” She forms a small smile but still shys away a bit. “H-Hi” One simple word yet she says it with so mu...

JTemby wrote:I really enjoy the direction of which you're taking the plot and your complete lack of self insert.
I look forward to reading more, keep up the good work, broseph.

I really hope your being serious and if so I really appreciate the feed back broseph

As i enter the class im greeted by roughly twenty eyes staring at me, did i say staring i meant judging. I take a look myself and notice people like the dark coloured girl at the front with long dark puple hair and a bandage on her left stump similiar to the on i also have on my left stump. I take a...

This is my first time doing this so the punction won't be the best and spellings might be wrong but I tried making a new character and Hisao and Hanako are still togeather just the new guy will eventually fall for Emi please leave constructive chrictisom and if I should carry on thank you. Well here...