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by LilyKitsune
Fri Sep 05, 2014 9:51 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Dancing: A Miki pseudo-route (Update 7/30/17)
Replies: 227
Views: 139786

Re: Dancing: A Miki pseudo-route (updated 9/3)

I feel like way too much time is being spent on a rather small detail that doesn't take anything from the story.
by LilyKitsune
Fri Sep 05, 2014 9:48 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: A new Life (Follows Hanako's Good ending)
Replies: 27
Views: 10723

Re: After High School (Follows Hanako's Good ending)

This is starting to feel like a bad american idol audition. We told you things you should improve, but from our perspective, you came in, disregarded the script formatting thing, and gave a piece riddled with english errors. Of course we're a little bothered before really getting to any of the writi...
by LilyKitsune
Fri Sep 05, 2014 5:58 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: A new Life (Follows Hanako's Good ending)
Replies: 27
Views: 10723

Re: After High School (Follows Hanako's Good ending)

Did anyone like anything about it? From what I seen in the VN/Game Hanako's Style of talking changes from time to time. Sometimes she stammers a lot sometimes a few words sometimes not at all. I might leave it in script format because I will just get the same complaints from people that think all K...
by LilyKitsune
Fri Sep 05, 2014 5:06 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: A new Life (Follows Hanako's Good ending)
Replies: 27
Views: 10723

Re: After High School (Follows Hanako's Good ending)

I'm with everyone else here. There were a lot of issues with sentence structure. Spelling errors(not typos), wrong words used, and rampant punctuation problems. The script format makes it difficult to read. It's often unclear whether a sentence was being said or whether it was a description or a tho...
by LilyKitsune
Fri Sep 05, 2014 1:55 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Developments (Post-Lilly NE) [Complete, 2015-08-11]
Replies: 1562
Views: 735168

Re: Developments (Post-Lilly Neutral End) - Ch.49 posted 9/4

Nobody wants to be someone's last pick, or their only choice. After dealing with so much rejection and internalized hatred, it would be impossible to feel like someone was with you because you were all that was left. You'd want them to be able to look through a crowd and only see you. Not wonder wh...
by LilyKitsune
Fri Sep 05, 2014 10:01 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Developments (Post-Lilly NE) [Complete, 2015-08-11]
Replies: 1562
Views: 735168

Re: Developments (Post-Lilly Neutral End) - Ch.49 posted 9/4

e: It really feels like Hanako's currently more focused on becoming a 'capable equal' (or proving to already be just that) instead of finding value in having a relationship with Hisao; then again, it's not a black and white situation obviously and Hanako does and more specifically did seem to love ...
by LilyKitsune
Thu Sep 04, 2014 11:01 pm
Forum: Public Discussion
Topic: Hanako's Broken Heart Club
Replies: 4862
Views: 1420577

Re: Hanako's Broken Heart Club

My only advice is... be open. If you need to, tell him your a tad under the weather. I don't know how he is or how you are so I can't give more advice, but just be open. If you want the manipulators tips, here they are. People like talking about themselves. If you have a hard time opening up, ask h...
by LilyKitsune
Thu Sep 04, 2014 10:10 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Dancing: A Miki pseudo-route (Update 7/30/17)
Replies: 227
Views: 139786

Re: Dancing: A Miki pseudo-route (updated 9/3)

"Color me impressed," she says. Her grin slowly falters, though. I can tell something's bothering him. Miki wasn't originally Mickey, was it? Anyway, I'm greatly enjoying the banter here! A fun setup, indeed. I can't believe I missed that! Thanks for pointing it out. My native language do...
by LilyKitsune
Thu Sep 04, 2014 9:48 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Dancing: A Miki pseudo-route (Update 7/30/17)
Replies: 227
Views: 139786

Re: Dancing: A Miki pseudo-route (updated 9/3)

"Color me impressed," she says. Her grin slowly falters, though. I can tell something's bothering him.

Miki wasn't originally Mickey, was it?


Anyway, I'm greatly enjoying the banter here! A fun setup, indeed.
by LilyKitsune
Thu Sep 04, 2014 9:10 am
Forum: Public Discussion
Topic: Hanako's Broken Heart Club
Replies: 4862
Views: 1420577

Re: Hanako's Broken Heart Club

So I have a date soon. I'm terrified of course. I'm not sure I could stand to disappoint another person. I'm worried currently because I'm getting over a cold, and moved into my new place while sick, so his requests to skype with me have been... well, not done. I've also not given a firm date on whe...
by LilyKitsune
Mon Aug 18, 2014 12:28 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Bells of Life Side Stories
Replies: 6
Views: 5092

Re: A Saki Scorned(One-Shot....Kinda)

Mirage_GSM wrote:You're not going to reach brythain levels of complexity I assume...
I hope. I cant take another one of those.
by LilyKitsune
Sun Aug 17, 2014 2:15 pm
Forum: Public Discussion
Topic: Hanako's Broken Heart Club
Replies: 4862
Views: 1420577

Re: Hanako's Broken Heart Club

metalangel wrote:
tansub wrote:
I hope that one day, I will find the true and genuine love I’m looking for.
You will.
Some people don't. Ever. In all likelihood, I'll be one of them. The odds are not with me.
by LilyKitsune
Wed Aug 13, 2014 1:35 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Running on empty [Emi's good end cont'd.] (updated: 3/9)
Replies: 54
Views: 19674

Re: Emi's End (updated: 12/8)

griffon8 wrote:
LilyKitsune wrote:On a more fun note, since its removal, people will be filled with terrible amounts of curiosity given the reactions to that chapter.
You got that right! :shock:
Lets just say the line "punish me with your cock, onii-chan" was used.
by LilyKitsune
Wed Aug 13, 2014 11:37 am
Forum: Public Discussion
Topic: Hanako's Broken Heart Club
Replies: 4862
Views: 1420577

Re: Hanako's Broken Heart Club

This is an interesting article that I'm going to drop in here: http://namebrandlindsay.com/2014/08/12/why-some-peoples-minds-try-to-kill-them/ And some of the comments are relevant to your situation, LilyKitsune, specifically this comment thread (if the link doesn't go right there, it's the replies...
by LilyKitsune
Wed Aug 13, 2014 9:51 am
Forum: Public Discussion
Topic: Hanako's Broken Heart Club
Replies: 4862
Views: 1420577

Re: Hanako's Broken Heart Club

Everything I enjoy is always slightly jaded. I do enjoy games, but I dont really have a place anymore. Rather, I won't for long. This month is the last of it. But I dont really have a lot of friends left nearby. One really. He is often busy. I just generally feel that if I were to disappear tomorro...