There was only once choice that was poorly worded.
The romance angle was practically non existent.
It contained the two most annoying side characters in the game (Hideaki and Jigoro)
There was no real character growth.
In general, nothing really happened for the majority of the story.
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- Fri Mar 24, 2023 12:08 pm
- Forum: Public Discussion
- Topic: Shizune's route consensus over 10 years later?
- Replies: 15
- Views: 58974
- Tue Feb 07, 2023 10:50 pm
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: DackFayded Story Archive, AKA "I Swear I Write More Than Just Smut" - Updated 12/31/2019
- Replies: 19
- Views: 43330
Re: DackFayded Story Archive, AKA "I Swear I Write More Than Just Smut" - Updated 12/31/2019
The smut stuff isn't typically my thing. I guess it was okay for what it was. There was one glaring mistake in the first story though. “Like what you see?” She asks breathily, and I’m vaguely aware of her hands pulling off my tie Her hands? Plural? Miki? Oops. The fluffy Lilly story I did like thoug...
- Mon Jan 09, 2023 12:11 pm
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: The Years That the Locusts Have Eaten (complete)
- Replies: 45
- Views: 61234
Re: The Years That the Locusts Have Eaten
That said, as I understood board norms, short stories go in one folder, longer stories go in folders on their own. There's not really a "norm" on this. Different people do different things. Some people give each of their short stories a different topic. Some include their short work in th...
- Fri Jan 06, 2023 10:11 pm
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: S13 Submission
- Replies: 3
- Views: 12103
Re: S13 Submission
I'll agree that the title is perfect. The story is generally nice, short, and sweet, although everytime I saw "Ibarazaki-chan" it threw me a little.
- Thu Jan 05, 2023 11:24 am
- Forum: Fan Works
- Topic: Relighting a Scene 2
- Replies: 2
- Views: 8706
Re: Relighting a Scene 2
Well, the re-lighting part is pretty good although it does make the skin tone on her face look slightly off.
- Mon Dec 19, 2022 11:50 pm
- Forum: Fan Works
- Topic: Relighting a Scene
- Replies: 8
- Views: 12969
Re: Relighting a Scene
That was all in gimp? That must have took some work.
- Mon Dec 19, 2022 11:49 pm
- Forum: Fan Art
- Topic: I post things here occassionally.
- Replies: 123
- Views: 141293
Re: I post things here occassionally.
There seems to be some texture on this one. Was this like an actual painted piece?
- Sat Dec 10, 2022 10:30 am
- Forum: Fan Works
- Topic: Relighting a Scene
- Replies: 8
- Views: 12969
Re: Relighting a Scene
Interesting. How exactly did you go about doing that?
- Sat Dec 03, 2022 11:10 pm
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: Akira Oneshots
- Replies: 7
- Views: 6418
Re: Akira Oneshots
It happens. Don't worry too much about it, just be more careful next time.Now that you've pointed it out I've got no idea how I missed it, and I've honestly got no excuse for it. It's something I should have caught before posting it and I'll own up to that. Should be fixed now though.
- Fri Dec 02, 2022 11:05 am
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: Akira Oneshots
- Replies: 7
- Views: 6418
Re: Akira Oneshots
It's a cute little story, but you really need to watch your tenses.
Also, just to make it a bit easier to read, you might want to leave a blank space between lines when you start a new paragraph.
Also, just to make it a bit easier to read, you might want to leave a blank space between lines when you start a new paragraph.
- Thu Dec 01, 2022 12:09 pm
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: Kenji's Secret Files (upd 20220525 'RedJack')
- Replies: 30
- Views: 42424
Re: Kenji's Secret Files (upd 20220525 'RedJack')
In the regular files, not the fragments, you present Kenji in an interesting way. He seems less like his typical paranoid self and more along the lines of a Lovecraft protagonist. Somebody calm and serious, but who has seem some real nasty stuff and is slowly loosing his grip. It's an interesting fe...
- Tue Nov 22, 2022 10:08 am
- Forum: Feedback
- Topic: Essaypost on my experience of the game
- Replies: 6
- Views: 13434
Re: Essaypost on my experience of the game
Considering Hisao just had a major heart attack I would assume most people went running to be healthy, which of course means Emi :P The first time I played it, I thought Hisao pushing himself was the last thing he needed to do. The guy just got out of the hospital, he doesn't need to do anything to...
- Sun Nov 20, 2022 10:00 am
- Forum: Feedback
- Topic: Essaypost on my experience of the game
- Replies: 6
- Views: 13434
Re: Essaypost on my experience of the game
Considering Hisao just had a major heart attack I would assume most people went running to be healthy, which of course means Emi :P The first time I played it, I thought Hisao pushing himself was the last thing he needed to do. The guy just got out of the hospital, he doesn't need to do anything to...
- Sun Aug 14, 2022 8:22 pm
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: Lap's One shots & misc - New Jan 3 2023 - "Dashing Through the Snow..."
- Replies: 44
- Views: 45044
Re: S12 Entry: No Good Deed
I love the set up for No Good Deed , and the fact that it ends in a pie-fight. You don't see that too often in stories. If anything, the story ended much too soon. This is the kind of thing I could easily see lasting for several chapters without wearing out its welcome. Any Flavor But Lemon was ... ...
- Fri Jun 24, 2022 6:17 pm
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: Asoko Desu's one-shots and short pieces ( September 12 / 2023 - Shake, Shake, Shake )
- Replies: 37
- Views: 103524
Re: Dust Bath - a short side-story (complete)
Rin's a bit more vulgar than I'm used to but I do like the mental tricks she uses.