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Thanks for the welcome, and i don't mind constructive criticism at all, on the contrary. I admit i am a bit intrigued at what you refer to with things going somewhere, that "impact/point", do you refer to character development, an emotional reaction from the reader, or something aside fro...

Take The Sun Away With Hisao's help, I manage to pull myself together a little before Miki gets back from her run. I think my eyes are still kind of red and... and I really don't want to let go of Hisao's hand, but maybe it's too dark for Miki to notice anything. My dad has fallen asleep with his n...

Solamente “It's to your left!” Hisao calls. Okay, so, that would be over-- “Your other left!” Miki chimes in. Is she lying? Is he? What if they both are? Unable to choose between left or left, or left-left, or... whatever, I take a few more hesitant steps forward. Maybe this is like a trust exercis...

You know, the more I think about it, the more this particular fiction tells me I've got an awful lot to learn about pacing and whatnot. Sure, things slow down now and again, but man, does slow and steady win the race. Hah, doesn't help that I've been trying to write myself outta this stupid corner ...

At the rate people are dieing here the zone will probably be empty in three days tops. Such is life in the zone, I guess. Well written and fun. A good job. I do feel the need to point out that it doesn't really pass the "Does it need to be a crossover?" threshold. It's a generic post-apoc...

I Know i am bad but least lemme try because this will be my last fan fic. Thanks for comment and i will try my best No one wants to stop you from writing, and I'm even sad to hear this is your last planned one. It's not a bad start at all, but just keep in mind that your story needs to be able to s...

Not to be rude at all, but don't you think maybe you should finish one of your other stories before starting a new one? And isn't this your fourth or fifth story that begins with your protagonist arriving at Yamaku?
Don't you ever get tired of writing the same thing?

This is awesome. Great original story and you've kept the essentials of the characters well while still giving a decent reflection of how they'd cope in a situation like this. I'd love to see more of this soon, and find out what Shizune and Misha will do when they discover what Hisao has done (or r...

The club room is a maze of darkness, lit only by a single beam of light that struggles to make it through the grimy window. It takes a few moments for my eyes to adjust. The floor is covered with the old beanbag chairs that students would have used in the library proper. In the center of the room, j...

The blood that gushes from my mouth is as hot as the rage that boils in my chest as Lezard empties his clip into my stomach. The muzzle flash lights up the three faces above me, as well as the rest of the gloomy library. No matter how bright it is though, it isn't enough to stop everything from goin...

The sun is beginning to break over the horizon as I finally step onto the grounds of what used to be Yamaku Academy. The student population has long since spread out among the 30 kilometer quarantine zone, but the different buildings are still the turf of various groups and factions. The girls' dorm...

“Here it is, man. Told you it was a piece of work, huh?” “This is what you've been begging me to get pieces from Mutou for?” I watch the scene as if from a distance. Maybe I have a vivid imagination, or maybe it's just because I've been having this dream off and on for months now. “Yeah, man. Don't ...

I pick my way through the rest of the town, heading towards the hill that leads to the place I used to call home. The straight, open road would be a death sentence however, so I step off the beaten path and begin moving through the wooded area. I come across a body not too far in. At first it looks ...

I... none of those thread titles are really any good, are they? They're all awful. Oh well. Anyway... I have to confess to some backtracking here. I originally had the first two parts of this in my one-shot thread, and, like I said, it was only supposed to be about three chapters long. But then it w...

I can definitely see some improvements in the revisions, and I enjoyed the Shizune chapter, I think it fits her established character pretty well. I would suggest adding a list of chapters to the first post in the thread though, and a note mentioning the things that were revised.