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- Mon Aug 24, 2020 1:18 pm
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: Yamaku Book Club (20220124 Dish Washing)
- Replies: 1945
- Views: 935666
Re: Yamaku Book Club (20200824 Zade Wither)
I feel quite bad bashing this type of writing. It's someone's first piece of writing. I think that's enough context and explanation for, well, all of it. That's sometimes why some people don't get any comments from me. :D And that is a problem, because people do need feedback to improve. If this pe...
- Mon Aug 24, 2020 2:50 am
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: Yamaku Book Club (20220124 Dish Washing)
- Replies: 1945
- Views: 935666
Re: Yamaku Book Club (20200824 Zade Wither)
I feel quite bad bashing this type of writing. It's someone's first piece of writing. I think that's enough context and explanation for, well, all of it.
- Mon Aug 24, 2020 2:15 am
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: Iron Saki
- Replies: 12
- Views: 7191
Iron Saki
This is a rewrite of Learning To Fly with a handful of minor changes, made with the approval of EurobeatJester. Strict effort has been made to adhere to the tones, themes, and structure of the original work and of the Katawa Shoujo universe as a whole. I owe a lot to this community and have a deep r...
- Thu Jul 30, 2020 11:46 pm
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: Yamaku Book Club (20220124 Dish Washing)
- Replies: 1945
- Views: 935666
Re: Yamaku Book Club (20200803 Before Yamaku)
Why does this exist? Nothing really happens here, and no particular mood is created.
Answer being that it's an author's first work and a warming-up of the engines. Author never came back, so presumably they're doing better work elsewhere.
Answer being that it's an author's first work and a warming-up of the engines. Author never came back, so presumably they're doing better work elsewhere.
- Wed Jul 15, 2020 6:00 pm
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: Cross-Pollination (Post Lilly GE, lewdfic)
- Replies: 6
- Views: 4224
Re: Cross-Pollination (Post Lilly GE, lewdfic)
- Tue Jul 14, 2020 12:26 am
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: Cross-Pollination (Post Lilly GE, lewdfic)
- Replies: 6
- Views: 4224
- Mon Jul 13, 2020 8:40 pm
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: Yamaku Book Club (20220124 Dish Washing)
- Replies: 1945
- Views: 935666
Re: Yamaku Book Club (20200713 Scarred Angel)
(I don't comment on that many of these, but Oddball needs company.) The author can be forgiven for their use of language because they aren't native English speakers. It has a number of spelling errors eg. "niversities" ought to be "universities," but the prose is not exceptionall...
- Sun Jul 12, 2020 10:17 am
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: Kagami Pseudo-Route [Updated 7/6]
- Replies: 351
- Views: 207698
Re: Kagami Pseudo-Route [Updated 7/6]
I know I'm probably being quite annoying with all of my recent comments around here recently, given this forums age and declining viewership, however I think it's amazing this game is still drawing people like me into the universe of fanfic (which I had previously had no idea was so good). Forgetme...
- Tue May 05, 2020 2:57 am
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: Re: Learning To Fly - A Saki pseudo-route (New NSFW Art 2/22)
- Replies: 1202
- Views: 1166847
Re: Learning To Fly - A Saki pseudo-route (New Art 5/4)
the halogen pond is a lovely blue
- Thu Apr 30, 2020 2:36 am
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: For Want of a Nail - Misha Route (Updated 11/1/19)
- Replies: 585
- Views: 510716
Re: For Want of a Nail - Misha Route (Updated 11/1/19)
I feel like prof is being unintentionally roasted
- Sun Apr 12, 2020 8:24 am
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: After the Dream—Rin's Arc/Miki's Arc (Complete)
- Replies: 115
- Views: 106099
Re: After the Dream—Rin's Arc/Miki's Arc (Complete)
art is never abandoned, only-
- Thu Mar 26, 2020 6:45 am
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: Precious Friendships (Shizune Bad End, Sisterhood plot) [Ch77 @ 16 May 2024]
- Replies: 108
- Views: 161612
Re: Precious Friendships (Shizune Bad End epilogue) (Updated 20 Mar 2020)
I do love unreliable narration: even though Shizune's route is flawed, the use of unreliability is a notable strength. It's cool to see you carrying that forward, and I look forward to your progress. I've also learned a lot from pushing work here. It's a nice feeling, to improve.
- Tue Mar 24, 2020 11:19 pm
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: Yamaku Book Club (20220124 Dish Washing)
- Replies: 1945
- Views: 935666
Re: Yamaku Book Club (20200323 Objects in Space)
Reading Objects In Space makes me wish I could have known and talked to Doomish. In terms of design, style, and intent it's very similar to a piece I recently did about Saki and Hisao being sad. I suspect that he also, as a writer of some over-the-top out-there stuff, wanted to pursue a more subdued...
- Tue Mar 24, 2020 7:08 am
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: Precious Friendships (Shizune Bad End, Sisterhood plot) [Ch77 @ 16 May 2024]
- Replies: 108
- Views: 161612
Re: Precious Friendships (Shizune Bad End epilogue) (Updated 20 Mar 2020)
Hello hello! I've vaguely seen your previous story, but I don't think we've ever talked before. Nice to meet you. On the subject of the story itself, I personally believe that chapter one was unnecessary and undesirable. This is a story; we don't need to be told everything through exposition. The se...
- Tue Mar 17, 2020 5:19 am
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: Hanako Fancopter One-Shots/Misc. Stuff (2/24/21--Wet Dreams)
- Replies: 81
- Views: 138836
Re: Hanako Fancopter One-Shots/Misc. Stuff (3/16/20--Contest Fic "A Hearty Rivalry")
It was a hell of a crash transition moving from Raiman's Riri to yours. Raiman's Lilly was an elegant, formal, and long worded lady. As usual, yours was a passive aggressive teenager out to cuck or be cucked. It's standard Normie fare, with most of the usual beats. You're right in that it's a little...