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Act II Finishing my home made rice and curry lunch, I head over to see how Hisao is faring. His chart mentions that he ate very little of his lunch, though he did take his dose of medication. Entering his room, I see him nervously pacing around. We make eye contact, and I give him a nod that he quic...

since it's already mentioned, yes Kenji was all in Hisao's mind

But can you guess the REAL twist?

Leaty wrote: I assume Hisao committed some variety of felony.

nope

LOL Kenji

how I love thee in crazy mode

# 2 wrote:First thought that come to mind: Did someone break Hisao?

yes

The Truth About Kenji Act I Coffee. One spoonful of half and half. Two spoonfuls of sugar. Stir. Sip. Hot, hot, hot. Blow, blow, blow. Sip, hot, sip, a little better, sip. Still blowing my cup of joe and holding his file, I make my way to my patient's room. Checking the chart outside his room, I see...

Completely blown away by this chapter

Absolutely wonderful read

You've outdid yourself, Scissorlips

Okay, here goes

I see butterflies
I see clouds over my head
I want to paint them



bleh, that sucked



EDIT: Retry

I see butterflies
I see clouds over my head
To paint them is life

Here's my next attempt

Want to play a game?
Risk? Australia is yours if
You join the council


I don't think I'll do Emi, your haiku for her is God-tier

Angry sex with Hanako?

Dammit, why is nothing happening when I'm throwing all my money at my computer monitor?

Oh, how did I overlook this precious gem?

I think it's wonderful so far

I do love some slice of life fluff

Looking forward to how this pans out

I glanced at the title and thought it was "A Hisao For Each Girl!"

Here's a quick try

Lilly

This tea is too cold
Fumbling through Daddy's wine shelf
Delicious champagne

Well, it's your story, you have the right to tell it how you want to.

Aside from that, I think cleaning up the format regarding dialogue (as BlackRockHanako suggested) and to use a broader variety if synonyms to prevent redundancy (as Brogurt pointed out) would make for a more polished work.

I wrote this to show a way that I think Hisao could have remedied the situation between himself and Hanako. Honestly, it feels like it wasn't Hisao but Hanako ("Hey, I said I hated you a few hours ago, what I meant is I love you let's have sex") that's the catalyst for the happy ending (n...

Everything from the conflict to the denouement seems to happen waaaaaaaaaayyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy too fast