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Oh noooooooeeesssssss!!!

On the upside, nicely done, and the art style is kinda cute

Awww, so cute. "They taste like my feet" has me loling as well :lol
You're really firing out the fan fictions, aren't you

However, I didn't like the way Hanako so suddendly proclaimed she (also?) likes girls. I mean, we knew where the story was going from the beginning but I'd have expected some more build-up and at least another chapter before any kiss. Instead the seizure became even more convenient. Yeah, the 'reve...

Trap yaoi, my sworn enemy, we meet again!!!

Really enjoyed this story. And the wedding was great, even though I think I missed a lot of references when talking about Shizune's side of the wedding The drabble was good as always too, and for the love of god, don't stop writing

Thanks to Mirage again for proofreading. :mrgreen: New Experiences Ch 7 “...somewhere else, and escape from reality...” What are we running from? “...felt better since I've made more...” I prefer the blueberry ones. “...didn't have to be nice, but he was, it...” They are nice. I don't need any thou...

Another good chapter, and there was some typos, but I can't be bothered to search through the whole text for them. Starting to like where the plots going as well, although I'm starting to second guess who the couple's gonna be now. Keep up the good work.

I think it's quite ironic that people spend ages writing 30,000 word stories, when these are just as good, if not better
Liked the Emi one best though.

I enjoyed this; I thought it was kinda cute. But I like your work anyway, so maybe I'm being biased :mrgreen: As for critique, I don't rummage for inconsistencies or mistakes in texts, so I have no negative feedback per say. But as you love criticism, one line did annoy me a wee bit: If what I say n...

I first noticed your fanfic on Fanfiction.net and a small criticism that was levied at it was that it seemed implausible to have Hanako stay in presence of Naomi with only a towel on, as she didn't seem to have progressed enough to feel comfortable that way. After the latest chapter, however, I can...

Something I didn't think about when I first read the chapter: I think epileptics don't usually lose consciousness when they have a seizure. But as you said her case of epilepsy is apparently more serious than usual... I found it really hard to write this bit. I have a friend who has epilepsy, but s...

Interesting first chapter. And yes, Hisao is dense. Very, very, veeeerrry dense. lets see where this goes

The seizure honestly seems like overkill. When planning out the story, I actually thought this for a few early versions. But ultimately, Naomi is at Yamaku for her epilepsy, and since people with epilepsy can generally attend regular school, I surmised that hers may be worse than average. This can'...

Guest wrote:Just when things were getting interesting, what a perfectly annoying yet predicable cliffhanger.

Yeah, well, it had to happen eventually. Was either this or she got hit by a bus.

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