My, what a strange phrase. Looks like I learned something new today as well. What does it mean? Stopped abruptly, perhaps?Guestimate wrote:Nah, that's a common turn of phrase in certain regions.pip25 wrote: Stood up? Gave up?
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- Sun Jul 14, 2013 12:28 pm
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: Redshift - Rika Route [10/2]
- Replies: 101
- Views: 46861
Re: Redshift - Rika Route [7/13]
- Sat Jul 13, 2013 8:39 pm
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: Redshift - Rika Route [10/2]
- Replies: 101
- Views: 46861
Re: Redshift - Rika Route [7/13]
I think I found a missing word here:
Otherwise, nice chapter. You do seem to continue introducing new characters, and I'm interested in seeing what will come out of all this.
Stood up? Gave up?She never gave me a reason for her disappearance, she just up and stopped talking to me.
Otherwise, nice chapter. You do seem to continue introducing new characters, and I'm interested in seeing what will come out of all this.
- Sat Jul 13, 2013 7:13 pm
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: A pseudo-pseudo Suzu route (completed)
- Replies: 916
- Views: 721688
Re: A pseudo-pseudo Suzu route (completed)
Okay, I just finished Act 3, but I can't keep going any longer. I need a breather, and at the risk of making myself look stupid again, I'll try to review these parts before moving on to the last act sometime later. First of all, I can see now that there is a good reason why this thread is 57 pages l...
- Sat Jul 06, 2013 6:11 pm
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: The Reqroom: Short Stories
- Replies: 11
- Views: 4394
Re: The Reqroom: Short Stories
Nice! I agree with BlackWaltzTheThird, this "personal log" style seems to fit Kenji's character really well.
- Fri Jul 05, 2013 5:36 pm
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: BlackWaltz's One-stop Oneshot Shop (New: 30th Apr 2014)
- Replies: 144
- Views: 197807
Re: BlackWaltz's One-stop Oneshot Shop (New: 6th July)
And since this thread has just been updated, I feel absolutely no shame in bumping it with the completely nonconstructive critique that I truly loved "The Game". ;) I had some sort of suspicion that the rest of the girls following Hisao was not something Rin had anticipated, but the ending...
- Fri Jul 05, 2013 4:59 pm
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: Redshift - Rika Route [10/2]
- Replies: 101
- Views: 46861
Re: Flowing Red - Rika Route [7/5]
Apparently, Hisao isn't very sure himself.Mirage_GSM wrote:So... Which is it?
This is exactly what I love about first person narration; you can get away with all sorts of inconsistencies because people themselves are often inconsistent in their views.
- Fri Jul 05, 2013 6:14 am
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: Redshift - Rika Route [10/2]
- Replies: 101
- Views: 46861
Re: Flowing Red - Rika Route [7/5]
I'm not sure what the problem is with this chapter either, it came out pretty well. It was interesting how you turned Hisao's recollection of the previous day into a dream, and the astronomy club is a nice idea that lets Rika and Hisao meet aside of the previous chance encounters. Good to see one of...
- Wed Jun 26, 2013 5:21 pm
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: Redshift - Rika Route [10/2]
- Replies: 101
- Views: 46861
Re: Flowing Red - Rika Route [6/23]
Hey, this is shaping up to be a fun story. :) Rika's got an interesting personality from what I've seen so far, and I'm quite looking forward to see where this will go. Most things that occurred to me, good and bad, had been said already by others, so I won't bore you with going through them again; ...
- Tue Jun 18, 2013 5:43 pm
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: Direction (post Rin neutral ending)(complete)
- Replies: 113
- Views: 75663
Re: Direction (post Rin neutral ending)(complete)
A truly remarkable story. I wouldn't have guessed you wrote "The Coin" as well, given how different the two fics feel from what I remember, but it does explain a few things regarding quality. ;) The characters were pretty great. Hisao certainly grew but still remained himself, which was pe...
- Sun Jun 16, 2013 11:42 am
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: For Want of a Nail - Misha Route (Updated 11/1/19)
- Replies: 585
- Views: 482203
Re: For Want of a Nail - Misha Route (New Chapter 6/15)
(I do appreciate the feedback, and certainly hope that I'm not scaring anyone off with my essays on why I'm right. I'll try to cut back if people feel it's distracting or otherwise detrimental to the story.) Don't you dare! ;) Or at least I, for one, greatly appreciate it when the author responds t...
- Sun Jun 16, 2013 10:18 am
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: For Want of a Nail - Misha Route (Updated 11/1/19)
- Replies: 585
- Views: 482203
Re: For Want of a Nail - Misha Route (New Chapter 5/26)
Please don't get started with this again. That was one line in act 1, and in the context that she and Shizune wanted Hisao to fetch something for them. Contrast that to the fact that there are plenty of scenes with her on the roof - in at least one of which she's carrying lots of stuff - and that t...
- Sun Jun 16, 2013 8:27 am
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: For Want of a Nail - Misha Route (Updated 11/1/19)
- Replies: 585
- Views: 482203
Re: For Want of a Nail - Misha Route (New Chapter 5/26)
Huh. Am I forgetting something important and need to re-read the rest of the story? Because that don't make sense. How did the doctors even come to think there's something to test for? Are there symptoms, is there an actual reason anyone thinks Misha might have a disability? Well, we do know that M...
- Tue Jun 11, 2013 7:28 pm
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: For Want of a Nail - Misha Route (Updated 11/1/19)
- Replies: 585
- Views: 482203
Re: For Want of a Nail - Misha Route (New Chapter 5/26)
I think you're misreading what I'm saying there. He recognizes that Misha exists, sure, but he doesn't really treat her as a person. He doesn't ask Misha to tutor him - he accepts her offer to tutor him when she expresses concern that he isn't taking his studies seriously. In the entire first half,...
- Tue Jun 11, 2013 3:25 pm
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: For Want of a Nail - Misha Route (Updated 11/1/19)
- Replies: 585
- Views: 482203
Re: For Want of a Nail - Misha Route (New Chapter 5/26)
Oh look, more discussion. Thanks for the reply. :) I understand perfectly that it's simply too early to disclose some of the plot or characterization decisions; I guess I will just have to wait and see. I have to say, though, this paragraph greatly surprised me: In Shizune's route, for the most par...
- Mon Jun 10, 2013 6:02 pm
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: For Want of a Nail - Misha Route (Updated 11/1/19)
- Replies: 585
- Views: 482203
Re: For Want of a Nail - Misha Route (New Chapter 5/26)
First of all, the narrator is Hisao, and if he is dating Misha, the narration will naturally focus on her with Shizune relgated a bit to the background. The preferences of the narrator will only get you so far. Compare this route to Hanako's or Lilly's route, for instance: you don't see either of t...