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This is cute! It may too easily solve the problem of Hanako finding Shizune and Misha overwhelming, but it's not impossible that it could come up later.

You may as well call this Chapter One, though, if you're continuing the story from here.

Early-morning word association brought me the gift of the phrase "Katawa JoJo" today. I would like to see how inventive the genre mashups became. I also like to try and speculate on why incomplete pieces became unworkable to their authors, but I suspect a great many of these don't actually...

This is amazing! I wasn't relishing trying to do this myself, even as a messy private reference.

I'm having trouble pushing through all the tense changes. This might be more interesting if the oc actually was unstuck in time. Zac managed to dodge the student council today, but the fella next to him might never see the light of day again. So it goes. When Zac came to on Trafalmador, his captors ...

Number five was probably going to be Akio I guess, but who was the sixth character intended to be? Takashi?

I just accepted that the character was a bit eccentric. I didn't think there was anything to "figure out" about her. Although if I had written my chapter after brythain's, I would have had Orie refer to her as "the living cliche." Just pinning down my idea of her, I guess. Her i...

I'll admit, when you mentioned that it was unfinished I selfishly wanted to jump in and write a Shizune chapter, but what's there is pretty good and I got some belly laughs out of it. It feels like the first sections set the situation up as comedy just to have Umber pull it in a totally different to...

They're meant to run together. Misha is not the best of translators. Shizune can figure out what it means, but it might take her a second to do so. Okay, thanks for the clarification. I think removing the "and I'm" - making it "Misha translates, adding her own comments as well" ...

...being a creation of 4chan meant they couldn't just dismiss it as tumblr nonsense... No, they just dismissed it as 4chan nonsense instead. Well, I was referring to channers, as in 4chan being interested in something other channers had created, but that part of my spiel is pretty speculative even ...

I might chalk it up to experiencing it in isolation. It's kinda the ultimate 'you had to be there' at this point. The 'life-changing' reaction to the game, at this point, is something of a meme. The game does a good job of capturing depression, isolation, and coping mechanisms from a variety of view...

To be honest, Sae's part in this was just bland for a character that had a bit of mystique to her in canon. He thinks the world of her and she doesn't get to show why. She's just there to deliver a pep talk. The assault accusation also comes off as weak, probably deliberately so in order to keep Nom...

This was fun. It feels like Rin doesn't interact with the other girls enough in general, not even watered-down space-cadet Rin.

I love it. I'm a sucker for economy in storytelling :3

lol at basically everything in this fic being a near-complete reversal of what wound up in canon but still managing to land on many of the themes in Shizune's arc. Cons: could have used less swearing, and the signing 'voices' of Misha and Shiz wound up 'sounding' the same almost all the time.

I myself am actually okay with the abrupt end. Getting stuck with the sign-inarticulate guy is a good punchline for a story that's dunking on Shizune. I honestly think the beginning could use some trimming since the bulk of the action is during the party. We're setting up Shizune as a neurotic overp...