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charmisokay wrote:I think I'm in love with your story.
No really its good (:

It's like I went back in time and wrote it myself. Except there's no such thing as time travel, and I didn't write this.

I read the first two chapters, and from what I saw they were written pretty well. This isn't really my kinda thing, so I'll just stop here, but good job on the narrative...depressing as it may be.

Still feels a bit like it's getting started, but then again it is the second chapter, so that's kinda justified. I do like where this is going, so as I said before I'm gonna keep my eye on this. Keep up the good work

In terms of introducing the characters, this is a good start, and I'll admit I wasn't looking very hard for grammar mistakes, but I guess that's why Mirage is here. I like the character, and think there is potential for this to be good. Just a question though, is this going to be a romance themed st...

Good story, and the sexy content wasn't too bad either. If you continued this I'd be interested to see where this could go.

This is great, and even better now that it has colour to it. Well done

Yay, some sort of plot is forming...and it's yuri. If you don't like yuri, don't blame me, blame Naomi. -Not knowing who protagonist is. -That said, why are they traveling? -Some comma splices Yeah, rereading it I should have name dropped her sooner, I might try changing it later. Secondly, in Hanak...

New Experiences Ch 2 After we arrive at the the station, there's still about half an hour before the train is set to arrive. I mentally gloat to those who will undoubtedly miss the train that we will be on. The platform has a quite a few people on it, but I wouldn't exactly call it busy. "Mayb...

Ravin Rin in a disco...I like it. Good to see this still going, keep up the good work.

Gah, I can just see my writing prowess shitting itself in the corner, as your cowers over it, laughing.

In all seriousness though, this is good. And long, which is a nice bonus. On another note ,don't know if it's just me, but does Lilly say "My, my" too much? Am I just imagining it?

The story was good, although the mix of tenses put me of a little bit. And even though the marriage was a bit soon, its a FanFiction, so reality can screw itself in favour for a fluffy ending Keep up the good work (I'm giving a thumbs up even though you can't see it!)

Thought I'd post something I had mulling around in my head for a while. Constructive criticism is welcome :D Oh, and if some spellings or terms seem weird, I'm Scottish, so I use the English Dictionary. Thanks to Mirage_GSM for checking this New Experiences Chapter 1 It's been a while since I went ...

Sperance wrote:Oh, God the lolality of it. What is it about scatological humor thats amuses me so? I'm more mature than that

You may be, but I'm not

Liking this, get a nice wee laugh when I read it.

Still enjoying this. Nothing like a well written fic.
Keep it up

As sad as it is, it works. The ending got me though...

...WAAAHHH...What's with all the melancholic stories floating around *sniff* What happened to happiness and fluuuuuuuuffff!!!