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Hey there.
I haven't finished reading the story, but I've already encountered quite a lot of grammar mistakes. Would you please run a grammar check and fix them? Because they look very annoying. Thanks.

Hey there, I also commented in your previous work. Since you wrote about my favorite character, I need to be more critical! ...just joking. I find it pretty well-written. I can feel that we do share a lot of similarities when writing about Shizune. An example would be what you said about "learn...

Hey it's me again. I knew there was a new chapter in October, but I couldn't find a time to read it until today. Great work. I'll definitely read the whole thing again when I have the time! If your story is ending soon, then it will be pretty disappointing! I'd like to see a part two! Some statistic...

Coming across your work after finishing my latest chapter. Great work! A few minor grammar mistakes, but overall very nice. Typically when I read stories, I pay attention to the tiny points, and I can pinpoint some "gems" in your work: "white knight", "sprint" and "...

Chapter 59: Top of the World “I tell you, Alvin, you’re the best. How are you always able to locate these secret gardens? I’m so impressed!” “Haha, you can say I’ve developed a special interest in secret parks. I hate crowded places. I seldom go to, say, countdown events for the New Year, or shoppi...

Chapter 58: Arrhythmia and Two Couples Arrhythmia. What a strange word to add to my list of vocabulary. You become like an old man for the rest of your life, regardless of your age. You cannot play soccer or basketball, or any kind of contact sport. Every fifteen minutes of walking you need to take...

Chapter 57: Elementary Error *Yawn* I stretch my arms and legs on the comfy hotel bed that I’m sleeping on. What a nice sleep! I’m feeling so energetic right now! Where are my glasses? Hmm… Found them, here they are, on the dresser. My wristwatch is here too. 6:02 am. Good morning, Hong Kong. I’m g...

Chapter 56: Diamonds in Diamond Hill? Current Time: 18:50 Estimated Arrival Time: 18:55 Time until Arrival: 00:05 The screen in front of me keeps switching between the arrival time and the flight map. Only five minutes left. I’m so excited right now! “Look, Alvin! There it is! What a view! So beaut...

Hey there! I've wanted to read your story for a long time, but I've been so busy with life and writing my own work (that's Precious Friendships ) that I couldn't make up any time for it. This weekend I have some reading time, so I decided to take a break from writing and read your story instead, bot...

Chapter 55: Honorifics Too Stuffy “If you wanna wear this dress… hmm… look. You’ve got to match it with this blouse. See? Much better combo, isn’t it?” Boss comes over and gives me a big frown. Sup? “Miki! How impolite of you! Even though Miss Yoshida is a frequent customer, you should still use ho...

Chapter 54: Pearl of the Orient Reaching my backpack for the key, I open my locker and am about to store my notes when I realize that the locker is already almost full. I can squeeze everything in, but I don’t think this is the best idea. Rather, what I should do is to sort everything out and throw...

Chapter 53: Stellar Performance *Cluck* *Glug glug* *Ah~~~~* Man, this hits the spot! Yup. A beer a day keeps the troubles away. This is always going to be my personal motto. With just one dose of beer, you temporary forget about all the pressure from work and from facing the folks. Beer, hands-dow...

Chapter 52: Quieres Buscar un Novio Ramen? Burger? Rice? Or pasta? Hmm… It’s so hard to decide! Mindlessly spinning my pen around, I find myself staring blankly at the whiteboard, my mind already teleported to the cafeteria several streets across. I hate studying~~~~!!!! Why do I have to study ling...

Thanks for proofreading, I fixed most of it I think. And yeah I think that having a chapter be what it needs to be instead of dragging it out for too long is important, but long can be decent as well if you revise it a few times, and read it over thoroughly. I'm still experimenting with length, I t...

Chapter 51: Very Tough Assignment “Riiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiing, Riiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiing…” “NO!!! PLEASE, SPARE ME!!!” I try to run away from the lethal attack of the flesh-eating giant cell phone, but my feet won’t listen to me. “Riiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiing, Riiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiing…” It’s getting closer! Why is the ph...