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Pt 1 - Reconciliation Sho steps forward to shake Akira’s hand. He’s about halfway through “It was a pleasure to meet you,” before she yanks him forward and hugs him, throwing in a hearty pat on the back for good measure. Once she lets him go he takes a step back and readjusts his glasses, “… to mee...

*SPOILER* Sho is not a robot sent back from the future. I'm on to your game you know. Every time something has seemed like a misstep by you, you've told us that you did it intentionally, so us seeing Sho as being too on the nose with how close his story is to Hanako's tells me that you are indeed p...

Giving her a sob story about losing both his parents and being an orphan with no other relatives to live with, just like her. Growing up enjoying reading and board games, just like her. Sho is obviously a slick con man looking to seperate the most famous author from Japan a good chunk of her monies...

A bit too.... flippant? For my tastes. It kind of makes me think of the phrase "Life sucks, deal with it."

I suddenly realize that I haven't commented on this story. And if I haven't commented then that means the author won't know that yet another person enjoys it. And if they don't know that another person enjoys it, then they might not continue it. And if they don't continue it, then it won't be finish...

Being that close to a girl you have feelings for such a long time is anything but easy. And I don't think you can "earn" a relationship. Either there are feelings on the part of the other person or there aren't. I rather think he's talking in dramatic terms. I.e., "earned" means...

This story as it is, is shaping out to just be doing the same story as the game except switching out Hisao with an OC. The thing I suggest is to actually have Hisao in this story. Have it so this story is going on at the same time as one of the girl's paths. I think that would make the story much be...

Little things like him being allot like a white knight... I disagree that he's acting like a white knight. He's acting like a friend should. And the thing with the funeral is that Hanako seems to have gotten over her feelings for Hisao really easily even though she thought about it for years. Every...

And now I'm feeling even less... I don't know... I guess the plot's just changed from what I was interested in at the beginning and now its... Ugh. I'll just say screw the consequences and say exactly what I'm feeling even if I look like an idiot. There was allot of emotion at the start with regrets...

I worry about Sho. *sigh* I guess I just afraid that he'll be a token love interest. Currently the only thing that really binds him to Hanako is him being her "publicist", but the two need more interaction on a basis of common interests and doing things together in their free time. I just ...

I'm not sure Emi and Rin's first proposed problems would really effect them much. Emi likes to run, losing her arms is even less of a hindrance than her legs, Rin's problems mostly stem from her way of thinking and she's an artist and draws despite not having arms

CNB wrote:

Guest wrote:Just out of curiosity, what was Hisao's job when he was alive?

Firefighter. He perished while attempting to rescue children from a burning orphanage.

Hhm......... I see what you did there.

Very constructive sir, I commend you on your excellent critique and eloquent choice of language. I shall be sure to incorporate your superior ideas into my work as soon as I am able. Thank you for lending me your precious time. Sorry if I was offensive. I'm just naturally wary of these sorts of fic...

I like the sound of this. If there's anything you need help with then don't hesitate to ask me. I can provide ideas and try searching for information if need be.

Huh, fanfic about an OC in Yamaku... eh...