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Just sat down and read all of this, and I love it. Sure, Emi's and Rin's relationship is pretty sad, and usually I wouldn't like it, but here it works. I feel a large part of the problem is Japan's view of metal illness rather than what Emi did. I'm hooked, and really looking forward to more. Thank...

I'm just waiting for the big reveal to be that Hisao didn't die and that he is taking out his revenge for them not forcing themselves more to be his friend. Yep, that's what my mind is thinking :). Or maybe both are true... But the ragged-haired, vengeful spirit of Hisao crawling out of Misha’s TV ...

Sharp-O wrote:Well, this wasn't soul-crushing or heart-stopping so that's good

I must be slipping...

As of tonight I've got another one in the bag, which I'll post in the next day or so. Now I've got to research some stuff.

Story Note:

Sleepy Rin will never stop being adorable. That is all.

6. The Space Between Words If the trip to Niiza hospital had been quiet, the trip coming back was positively soundless. Emi drove with her hands painfully tight on the wheel, shaking with anger and distress. In the back seat, Rin was hunched into the corner, bruised face turned perpetually to the w...

Every bloody chapter is fresh dip into scolding hot feels. I am glad that, once Lily told her about Emi's incident, most of Rin's bitterness faded into genuine concern. She may have been hurt but, deep down, she still cares about Emi and that's the brightest this story has been so far. :lol: Thank ...

Mirage_GSM wrote:Good chapter, but you consistently misspell "Lilly" - and now you've infected Sharp-O as well...

If anyone wants me, I'm going to be over here, repeatedly slamming my head against the nearest piece of tubular scaffolding.

Story note: Rin Out of everything I’ve written so far on Fractures, this chapter contains the stuff I felt worst about doing. Namely, Rin’s illness and her treatment in its immediate aftermath. I’m choosing to take the likelihood of her breaking down under pressure as canon – after all, she got ver...

5. All Mad Here They drove to the hospital in silence. Lily tried to talk to her a few times, but Emi cut her off savagely. She would not, could not speak to Lily or to anyone else, not now. She was too sick, too horror-struck, too furious to even form words. Besides, in order to speak she would ne...

“I would have liked to seen the first one.” Oh boy... I'm certain she would've :-) Nice chapter again! And this , writing chums, is why it’s vitally important to have other people read your stuff. Ugh. Firstly, it’s ‘would have liked to have seen’, which I have now edited in the post. And secondly,...

4. Empty Canvass Lily called Rin’s apartment three times: once just after Emi’s conversation with her mother, once while they were waiting for the cab to take them back to the Ministop, and again in the Ministop itself, while they sat at a table and waited for the JAF engineer to replace Emi’s tyre...

Please don't stoop to the "police is composed of nothing but idiots who couldn't be bothered to cut short their doughnut-break even if dead bodies start appearing everywhere" trope. So far you've gone for a mostly realistic tone, and that would seriously impact the believability of yor st...

In my head, Emi and Rin definitely dance like this: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=h1S0c-82EDE

It's the only dance Emi knows. And it's dangerous: once, at a party, she accidentally punched Rin in the eye.

Sharp-O wrote:On the more positive end, I really like this characterisation for Rin. It's... charming and a little bit hot

This makes me happy.

I’m so pleased that people seem to be enjoying reading this as much as I’m enjoying writing it!

Mirage_GSM wrote:But of course now they've got even more credence...

Obviously I don’t want to give anything away here. All I’ll say is that there is more than one way of looking at almost everything...