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I have to agree with Nuke about being unsure about Hisao’s thoughts - though rather than being boring, it’s more that they are perhaps a bit static. Hisao’s moping, (especially in the line Nuke quoted), is consistent. I expect that’s why Nuke finds it uninteresting, because there doesn’t appear to b...

Agreed! It was a charming little story, I didn’t know there was another contest? Anyway, it was nice! Other than some awkward phrases, and few places where a word has clearly been omitted, it was technically sound too!

Next time send it to me for a proofreading pass though!

A nice little updates. Of course, the greater shadows still loom. I like Rokuro, like a mini- Hisao. And actually it was really interesting reading your little note after the update, I didn’t know the consensus on cpr had changed!

It's a good thing I'm commenting now, rather then when you first started as I initially planned too. I don't need to give the usual warnings and welcomes, your writing surpasses most in technical ability, but I fear that sounds as If I'm accusing your writing of being somewhat 'impassionate'. That i...

Quite an enjoyable read. Bry is right about the colours of this story, it’s actually really quite evocative. I don’t mind super rich Lilly as a concept that much, so honestly, this is an alround good read for me. Though a bit flowery at times.

Quite humorous seeing Aura and Cruds comments.

blood on the baton, slight smile on the lips. Molly really is best girl.

Great work as always.

I can never read stories like this without thinking back to the wonderful Munchenhausen’s “Josh-San.”

That being said, I’d love to get a beer with Zade. Him and Kenji seem like two really chill and down to earth guys, and I bet they’d be a pleasure to drink with.

Very D'aww indeed!

It always amazes me how your Jigoro can be both profoundly an impatient ass, and well, profound. That last line is oddly inspiring, (doubly so for readers who are familiar with your Jigoro!) As always, your SPAG is impeccable, and your mastery of the form is awe-inspiring. The lines drip with humour...

Well, delightfully slice of life - not in such a way that it’s a piece of life to enjoy and ultimately meaningless, but in the way that I think we all have these “slices of life” in our own worlds. Rika’s frustration, whilst I think coming across a bit suddenly (Hell, I can’t expect everyone to writ...

A delightful read. The flashback was a good moment, and helped to split up the Jigoro scenes so it wouldn’t send so obvious he changed, but really, I get the impression he was going to say yes even from the first scene. I think Jigoro opening up was a little hamfisted, but it’s a good premise I have...

Wow, for a first foray into the forums, wow. Anyway, I usually preface first posts on the renai with a welcome! Welcome to this strange and peculiar little community of us, it's very good to see some new talent on the boards, and you clearly have some interesting thoughts on the game from your other...

Welcome to the forums! Always good to see some new faces here! As always, first port of call for a new writer should be the 'Tips of Fanfic Writers' thread, great information and tips in there! 3) I won't tolerate any type of offensive behaviour and comments. I'll gladly accept feedback, but not ran...

How fitting, after all our (my) talk of monuments, you should choose the same as me. Memorial services are solemn, but somehow freeing affairs. Honestly, it's Mutou's silence that speaks volumes in this story. That final paragraph touched me immensely. Somehow, with the focus being on Saki's remembr...

What a lovely story! The quotes from in game work wonders too to establish, 1) where are and 2) how these characters are circling one another. Of course, there’s a storm on the horizon for these two... but this is still an optimistic tale. The first section and second section are undoubtedly the str...