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Rhodri wrote:All I have to say is to this good news is Excellent.

You were expecting Mister Burns weren't you?

No, neither of those influenced me much. I was expecting Bill & Ted.

I could see Hisao becoming a literature major being an influence of Hanako.

Hoitash wrote:Even though the summer air was slightly cooler at night, it still humid, and beads of sweat formed on their bodies, clinging to their clothes and hair.

Is this a result of correcting what Mirage pointed out, or did he miss this one?

Agreed that Shizune’s reaction is over the top. Japan has a strong social pressure against such public displays of affection. As people have mentioned before, your writing is quite good, but could use polishing. It’s never to the point that your meaning isn’t clear, but it does draw me a bit out of ...

My, what a lovely shade of violet this story has!

acquireTigris wrote:Since there are no grammatical or spelling errors (so far), I'll leave the chapter as it is.

Well, ‘whoa’ is spelled like what I just wrote, not ‘woah’.

Mirage_GSM wrote:

That woulda been off-screen, as I haven't yet written anything involving Soon-hee's time at Yamaku (not counting the first half of Chapter One.)

I think griffon's comment was about the grammar...

That is correct.

I was worried they’d keep me at a distant, but they accepted me pretty much right away. Where was she worried about being kept? I nodded, “I enjoy it, and now that the first years have suffered the humiliation of being beaten by someone who’s seventy kilograms soaking wet, a lot easier to manage.” ...

Four days and no comments? You deserve much more than to be ignored for this chapter. Anyway, I really liked this. The way Misha and Lynda interact is positively lovely. Even when Lynda thinks their date is taking place on the set of The Godfather . Lynda nodded, “Yeah, it’s gone a lot better than I...

I really enjoy the little hints to various noodle incidents you include.

Hoitash wrote:resent location in the 1920’s

Dates are not possessives.

Hoitash wrote:Built in the 1920’s as part of the move

Still aren’t.

Hoitash wrote:Hisao nodded, “There President was our Student Council Treasurer.

Oh, so close to not having any of these.

Okay, glad I skipped ahead to find out other readers’ reactions to the choice point; no need to go into that. That’s a really shitty move on Miki’s part to make a test like that. Her brother gave her lousy advice. The air conditioning hit me, its contrast to the warm spring air of the early night ou...

acquireTigris wrote:

Mirage_GSM wrote:You shouldn't tell us that ahead of time...

I assumed it was obvious from the chapter. It's too late now. I can't delete it. Oh well.

My favorite way of putting it is: “It erred on the side of clarity.”

Mirage_GSM wrote:I never even realized F&C's stories were supposed to be in the same continuity ^^°

It’s more apparent if you read the stories in his pastebin. I refer to them as ‘FluffandCrunch’s Lilly Good-End Stories’, though I can’t recall if that’s the official title or if I made it up.

It was exciting enough. I liked it.

Hoitash wrote:He was ended up so deep in thought he almost missed his line trying swim away from him.

You seem to have an extra verb here.

Zarys wrote:A new level of absurd pairing is reached...only a Hanako X Jigoro fanfic can do better. (and if the fanfic is good, not so uncredible, thus it would be awesome, I propose a title : The Scared and the Beast )

I disagree. Shizune X Rin is much less plausible.