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Ahh!! This is the first time in a fic I've actually loved Hisao's parents, this is great! It's weird to see Lilly faltering, even if it is just in her dream. KS and many fics continue with the 'perfect and proper' shtick. This is a good change up from that. Also, so much art holy crap!! A cover piec...

Another great chapter man. This one was really deep, our first time really getting a look at Saki's past and it definitely struck a chord with me. The description of everything surrounding her past was so accurate and vivid, just incredible work Eurobeat!

Congratulations from one engineer to another! Enjoy the post-graduation celebrations!

Hey man, glad to see you're putting this on the forums! Always love your work!

Another great chapter of course. I wonder how Hisao will show Natty how he feels.

As for the Mutou/high school debacle, I definitely had a teacher that was EXACTLY like that in high school.

“Didja miss me?” Absolutely, Sharp :wink: New Hisao Plus. Super Hisao II Turbo. Don’t ruin this tender moment by saying those out loud, Rika… She definitely should have said these out loud. :lol: Great chapter of course and welcome back Sharp! Hope everything is on the right track for you now! Also...

It's about damn time Hisao! For a second there I thought he wasn't going to confess in this chapter and I was really disappointed, but I'm happy to say I'm very wrong. Another great chapter, InSaiyan, perhaps my favorite thus far because it contains such an important plot point. Although it will be ...

By that I did not mean to suggest to write a fluff piece or something of the sort, but rather to write something short that sets things up for later as opposed to doing a crucial scene right now.

Hope you get all settled in Eurobeat! Definitely take care of that stuff first before writing.

As for the chapter go with what you feel, you have good instincts, although it may be easier to buy yourself some time to think ahead and just do another Yamaku chapter. Just a thought.

I take a nearby seat and scoot up to the table, turning to the girls beside of me before speaking up. I think that should be "to the girls beside me" or "to the girls to the side of me." But I'm no grammar nazi. :D I like this chapter a lot, I wonder what the conversation was ac...

Also, not even lbelling the door to the girls' locker room seems excessively lax *labelling :wink: Also, I think in the text InSaiyan mentions that Hisao does not check what is on the other side of the door, so it may be the pool or the locker room. I could have misread that though. Apparently I wa...

Nice chapter, short and sweet, although I can definitely see this setting up a few things for the future with Hisao.

Not to tread on Mirage's territory but there was a couple cases of mixed up tenses.

InSaiyan wrote:I wonder what she was about to say? Maybe it was nothing.

I'm right there with you, Hisao. InSaiyan is a cruel cruel man.

Another great chapter, the description of the dancing was done fairly well! Hopefully they'll get to talk more later in the day.

I like this chapter a lot! I feel like if Naomi wasn't third-wheeling they would have kissed... Dangit Naomi

One error:

InSaiyan wrote:The two are out of site now, leaving me alone in the courtyard with my thoughts.

Should be sight not site.

I probably wouldn't have repeated all of Kenji's speech again. It's nice that it seems to provide a common feature for each arc - like Iwanako's letter does in the VN - but in the VN it is also not included in its entirety in each route. As it was I found myself skipping those paragraphs as soon as...