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Sorry I didn't give a hand proofing this one, I was pretty tied up with some other stuff so I didn't have much free time. I didn't get to tell you the other day but this chapter came out better than you made it out to be, sure festival scenes are always pretty similar but I still enjoyed this. I did...

Helbereth wrote:This whole thing is an erratic page-turner.

THAT, we can all agree on

YourFavAnon wrote:

Scissorlips wrote:Future Blind
“I'm not going to graduate.” I whisper.

I feel Death gently nodding behind me.

“I'm sorry.” He says.

And then I wake up.

Wait, what?

Why must you always leave so many questions unanswered, man ;_;.

OH GOD, It's killing me too, I'm going to go insane before this ends

Hoitash wrote:Obviously they added the machine gun themselves. It would be insane for 14th century power armor to have a machine gun attached to it.

Wouldnt 14th century power armour be insane in the first place?

Helbereth wrote:"Because that's what friends do."

Aaaaawwwwwwwww, Rin is just great in this, I think you portrayed her quite well.

Also,

Helbereth wrote:"What? This? Yeah, I kinda got into frilly stuff I college."

Shouldn't it say "...stuff in college."

Catgirl Kleptocracy wrote:Something about it never sounds write when I'm typing it

Whoah, was that pun intentional or just a spelling error?

I really enjoyed this scene, and I especially loved the introduction of Miyoto the dress shop owner, he is amazing and I hope we get to see more of him in the future because he is such a funny character

LOL WUT wrote:Pretty Damn good story if I do say so myself.

I second this!

Yaay! I enjoyed that chapter, but now we have to wait another week

Helbereth wrote:I put together some fan art.

I could imagine Miki drawing this on the chalkboard:

Kiss him, GAYLORD!

Hahaha awesome! Scissorlips needs to put this on the first post with the other fan art stuff.

Looking forward to reading more :) I just added a huge section to the second part (Rin and Emi) that I hadn't thought of. I know it's a little odd, but I had to set up some conflict somewhere along the line - conflict I later came up with when I wrote out an outline. I kinda approached this story b...

( list of incredibly derpy mistakes ) Thank you, sir. All of those are very good catches. I may have to recruit you... I would be more than happy to do any proofreading you may need. I just pointed out quite a few mistakes in Scissorlips' latest update, so I guess I just have quite a good eye for t...

Great chapter, but I noticed a few mistakes, and I thought I would point them out seeing as you helped me with my proofreading :) "No, I'll working on that. But later" (where she's talking about the sidekick name) Should say "I'll work on that" “That' right. Well... it's my excus...

Just a few mistakes I noticed when I read the second part again: “We could find always find a way to make it interesting.” Should be "We could always find a way to make it interesting" (you put 'find' either side of 'always') and "conspirationally" Is spelled: conspiratorially an...

Great chapter Meadows! Miki is great and you definitely have her personality down. I also loved the little reference to Suzu playing Battleship in her dream. Keep it up, I've enjoyed this thoroughly so far