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- Wed Jun 03, 2009 11:37 am
- Forum: Public Discussion
- Topic: 4LS
- Replies: 50
- Views: 16772
Re: 4LS
Oh dear. And the worst part is that the answers to this topic actually give more and better insight into 4LS than you'd ever. want. to. know. I has a profile. You can has it if yuo want it. You'll need to keep track of stuff like 'male' and 'oldest fart, about least senior staff member' yourself. An...
- Tue Jun 02, 2009 8:35 pm
- Forum: Public Discussion
- Topic: facebook group?
- Replies: 11
- Views: 4409
Re: facebook group?
... As far as I am concerned, you can do whatever you want with Facebook, within license limits. I do, however, think that Facebook is a blight on the level of the Bubonic Plague, all the more so because it is resistant to vaccination and immunization. Any and all relevant linking that I see anywher...
- Fri May 29, 2009 1:40 pm
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: If you are lost.
- Replies: 20
- Views: 9596
Re: If you are lost.
I think you're starting to lose momentum. Rather than going further, reread everything you have put up so far, check, consolidate, cut, tweak everything that can be improved. Everything. There's lots of room for improvement. I'm not any meaningful benchmark or oracle to go by, but I do that for abou...
- Fri May 29, 2009 11:15 am
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: Golden Room
- Replies: 56
- Views: 28615
Re: Golden Room
The only thing I have a real issue with. There were a few other stumbling blocks I noticed before, but you cleared them up from when I first read to when I actually got around to posting.vernicious knid
Good show.
- Thu May 28, 2009 3:16 pm
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: An story
- Replies: 12
- Views: 6015
Re: An story
I caught you out at Yuuko. But as in Hisao's case, by then it was too late and the jaws of the trap had sprung shut.
The very thought of a pimp Hisao was hilarious enough to cause a chuckle. Boy's so not a playa.
The very thought of a pimp Hisao was hilarious enough to cause a chuckle. Boy's so not a playa.
- Wed May 27, 2009 6:14 pm
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: Schwäche
- Replies: 26
- Views: 12801
Re: Schwäche
Ho-lee shit.
Now (most of) this is a damn good idea, why oh why didn't I think of it before...?
8/10, would read again.
Correction: 8/10, WILL read again. Proceed.
Now (most of) this is a damn good idea, why oh why didn't I think of it before...?
8/10, would read again.
Correction: 8/10, WILL read again. Proceed.
- Tue May 26, 2009 12:30 pm
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: If you are lost.
- Replies: 20
- Views: 9596
Re: If you are lost.
While Hanako's trademark way of speaking positively drips with ellipses, you might want to introduce a little variation by u-using her j-j-just as d-d-istinctive st-stutter in appropriate places. :wink: Also, said ellipses are always made out of three periods, no more no less. You can use smaller or...
- Sun May 24, 2009 5:19 pm
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: 'Shades of Distinction'
- Replies: 11
- Views: 7955
Re: 'Shades of Distinction'
3-Glowing Orange Sunset --- I wake up to the annoying sound of my alarm clock and immediately notice a tense atmosphere about the dorm. It's quiet. Too quiet. I slink out of bed. Taking a glance out of the window, I see that everyone else is already up and eagerly watching everything being set up fo...
- Sun May 24, 2009 2:18 pm
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: If you are lost.
- Replies: 20
- Views: 9596
Re: If you are lost.
don't expect anything of silentcook quality :shock: ...awaiting the rest of the story. Concerning critique, for starters Emi and Rin are in a different class from Hisao and Hanako. You might also want to consolidate your text a little, making it into blocks rather than line-space-line-space for the...
- Sun May 24, 2009 8:39 am
- Forum: Public Discussion
- Topic: What would sex with each of the girls be like?
- Replies: 394
- Views: 112992
Re: What would sex with each of the girls be like?
Thread re-nuked. Seriously people, take personal discussions elsewhere. Third time around I'm going to hand out bans.
- Sat May 23, 2009 9:24 pm
- Forum: Act 1 Preview
- Topic: Question about save files
- Replies: 5
- Views: 3830
Re: Question about save files
Probably they won't be compatible. We're going to tweak Act 1 a bit and do more changes from now to the full release. You'll only know for sure when it'll be done, but prepare for suckage just in case.
- Fri May 22, 2009 6:51 pm
- Forum: Public Discussion
- Topic: Just a random question
- Replies: 44
- Views: 18098
Re: Just a random question
A couple or three of those. And frankly, I wasn't too impressed by the lot...
- Wed May 20, 2009 8:39 am
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: Clad in the Dark.
- Replies: 12
- Views: 5461
Re: Nightmare of Kenji.
Smells like machine translation. Machine translation isn't good. It mangles writing from "decent" to "somewhat understandable".
If it's not machine translation, the problem's worse...
If it's not machine translation, the problem's worse...
- Tue May 19, 2009 12:40 pm
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: 'After the Festival'
- Replies: 8
- Views: 4656
Re: 'After the Festival'
Nice first attempt. Stuff & things: -You WISH Rin was that easily readable, so soon. Nevermind so easily flustered. You have Hanako'd her indeed, which goes against characterization. -Some typos here and there; not too many, but unluckily in some really mood-breaking spots. ...like the fooling a...
- Tue May 19, 2009 7:55 am
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: Big Blue
- Replies: 7
- Views: 4900
Re: Big Blue
Listen to this man, he FIGHTS for FREEDOM.
Good stuff Envy, just a few rough spots. And just to see if I can make a few heads asplode, those are the sudden bursts of poetry I'd usually expect from crud.
Good stuff Envy, just a few rough spots. And just to see if I can make a few heads asplode, those are the sudden bursts of poetry I'd usually expect from crud.