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Hey check it out! It's Wednesday, and I actually have a chapter finished and ready for posting! It's an Octoberfest miracle! Well, okay, maybe not really. You should all be happy that I managed to break away from WoW enough to get this thing together, in any case. Okay, that's presumptuous of me, b...

Silentcook wrote:
...Which is why I advocate early planning, as opposed to making things up on the go.

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If it makes you feel any better, I've got pages and pages of back-story, outline, character bios, and even some cultural research hiding behind the scenes.

Not all of us are writing blindly.

If you need someone to kick you in the teeth and tell you you're doing it wrong, you could do worse than an internet forum. Most of what I kept bringing up was the structure and such, but, yeah, you might have forgotten, at some point, who Hisao, Kenji and Hanako were in the original tale. The story...

I thought their (usual) purpose was fanservice, not setup for another conflict? Their usual purpose is downtime. They let the audience catch their breaths before moving forward into the next arc. This. Perhaps I'm not the one who should be pointing this out since I've had my story hanging out at th...

I'm not sure what's wrong with 'perverted', though, and I use 'dirty mind' quite regularly when she describes herself. It's just that it's so clichéd. And dirty-minded is fine, but you often find perverted and dirty to be overused in- ...er, certain publications. Particularly those of a lascivious ...

but I'm not particularly thrilled by the noir genre. According to him, it's based on an American graphic novel Hmm. Watchmen? I've yet to see that, I hear it's quite good. Good guess, but Watchmen was 2009, and this movie had to be out and available on DvD in 2007. Similar in style and timbre, thou...

Hoitash wrote:I am sadly rather reliant on feedback to improve my writing, so I very much appreciate your help.

Don't I know it...

Okay, this is the shortest chapter I've released in a while, just barely tipping 6000 words. I had planned to continue further, but it turned out to run very long and this worked nicely as a chapter, so I decided to forego trying to cram two chapters together and give myself a break by posting this...

[He has lost his way. He knows no other path. He must take his vengeance against a society that has wronged him. He is Bushman. He is the night.] [Hideaki?] [Yeah?] [Shut up.] This right here; this made me lose my shit. a blind girl (who Deer Man will probably take as a wife or something) After rea...

XxSaberxX wrote:You start wishing that your girlfriend was Lily and ended up breaking up with her cuz she's nowhere close...??

This just means you're delusional.

How about; you start keeping the ks forums and 4chan thread open in your browser for no really good reason.

Jigoro Hakamichi's graciousness is limited, but he's always accomodated his niece's needs. With some bluster for good measure, he agreed to let her use his master bedroom during the stay. His delicate words echoed in Hisao's mind, "make sure my niece doesn't end up falling out a window while you're...

Crap, I think I've missed the last 3 of 4 updates because I haven't had time to read them (partially your fault). Unfortunately, I've had too much going on to read for pleasure (again, partially your fault). Just thought I'd post something here since I've been rather consistent with reading and comm...

so why not? Because unreliable narration is a very dangerous card to play and Scissorlips already used his "get out of jail free" card last time. He can't really get away with that again until he saves up enough credit. Never for a moment did I think that's what actually happened. Speculation is ha...

Seeing as how Miki's sharing her bed and Suzu doesn't exactly want to advertise her exploits it seems a reasonable step to take. Also, at any point in the story, as we've learned, it's possible for Suzu to just be dreaming. Perhaps the entire phone-sex sequence was a fabrication or her tired, horny...