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by Helbereth
Mon Jun 03, 2013 2:00 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Tomorrow's Doom ~ Up: 04/30/16 ~ recommitted to completion.
Replies: 853
Views: 369538

Re: Tomorrow's Doom ~ Up: 6/02/13 ~ C.38 - Departure

Yes, well, if you think about it, where else would their parting really take place considering it's Japan? Funny you should phrase it that way... I kind of guessed something like that would be the case, but I think a little suspension of disbelief is in order. While Hisao got his ticket checked, Ai...
by Helbereth
Mon Jun 03, 2013 4:39 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Tomorrow's Doom ~ Up: 04/30/16 ~ recommitted to completion.
Replies: 853
Views: 369538

Re: Tomorrow's Doom ~ Up: 6/02/13 ~ C.38 - Departure

BlackWaltzTheThird wrote:Not as any acronyms that I've seen, no. Of course, others may feel free to correct me.
I think RTG was the first acronym I ever learned, in like second grade--back in 1987ish (aka the stone age). Before I ever even heard things like FBI, CIA, or TGRI.
by Helbereth
Mon Jun 03, 2013 2:27 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Tomorrow's Doom ~ Up: 04/30/16 ~ recommitted to completion.
Replies: 853
Views: 369538

Re: Tomorrow's Doom ~ Up: 6/02/13 ~ C.38 - Departure

I internally giggled. You should hear Hoitash's description thereof... he drew some terrifying historical parallels. Stuff about Hisao taking Aiko home. In fairness, I'm pretty sure arriving home with SURPRISE GIRLFRIEND would be a bad idea no matter what else was happening. If you're going to comp...
by Helbereth
Mon Jun 03, 2013 12:23 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Tomorrow's Doom ~ Up: 04/30/16 ~ recommitted to completion.
Replies: 853
Views: 369538

Re: Tomorrow's Doom ~ Up: 6/02/13 ~ C.38 - Departure

To be honest I think there was far too much of a focus on sex in this chapter. There are reasons--beyond the physical--why that's the case, though. It's a convenient allegory for some of the things they're unwilling to admit to each other on some level--the abstinence plan isn't just about sex, for...
by Helbereth
Sun Jun 02, 2013 8:21 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Observations - Oneshot
Replies: 14
Views: 7784

Re: Observations - Oneshot

That said, I'm with Mirage in that a clarification that this mystery nurse is not the nurse would be helpful. This I would agree with. All you'd need to do is mention the Head Nurse as being more the face of the nursing staff and establish him as a separate entity (him never having a name of his ow...
by Helbereth
Sun Jun 02, 2013 6:30 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Tomorrow's Doom ~ Up: 04/30/16 ~ recommitted to completion.
Replies: 853
Views: 369538

Chapter 39 - Departure (part 2)

Previous Chapter | Part 1 | Next Chapter _________________________________________________ ~^~ Once I get outside, that distraction becomes obvious—rain really kills my amorous mood. As I cut across the lawns, making my way toward the back entrance of the girls' dorm, the rain sweeps in sideways. T...
by Helbereth
Sun Jun 02, 2013 6:29 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Tomorrow's Doom ~ Up: 04/30/16 ~ recommitted to completion.
Replies: 853
Views: 369538

Chapter 39 - Departure (part 1)

As things go, sometimes you look back and realize something was wrong with the way you separated things. Well, now that I've had a chance to look at it and read through some monthe later, I realized that this last chapter in act 4 should actually be split in two, with the second half being about tw...
by Helbereth
Sun Jun 02, 2013 6:29 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Tomorrow's Doom ~ Up: 04/30/16 ~ recommitted to completion.
Replies: 853
Views: 369538

Chapter 38 - A Cure For Insomnia

Okay, so, Wednesday was a wash, but hey look... here's a giant chapter! It's long enough that I didn't even consider using just two posts... so, yeah... Anyway, I'll probably aim for Sunday to continue my release schedule, so don't expect Wednesday releases anymore. Today just so happens to be my l...
by Helbereth
Sun Jun 02, 2013 1:52 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Hideaki: A Tale of Manliness
Replies: 186
Views: 56701

Re: Hideaki: A Tale of Manliness

Hoitash wrote: Even in failure, their is success :wink:.
Hoitash wrote: their is success
Hoitash wrote: their
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by Helbereth
Sat Jun 01, 2013 8:13 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Hideaki: A Tale of Manliness
Replies: 186
Views: 56701

Re: Hideaki: A Tale of Manliness

Hoitash wrote:For what its worth man, I thought they were a hoot and a half :D.
I'm with him--they were still good in a totally ridiculous kind of way.
by Helbereth
Sat Jun 01, 2013 11:12 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Tomorrow's Doom ~ Up: 04/30/16 ~ recommitted to completion.
Replies: 853
Views: 369538

Re: Tomorrow's Doom ~ Up: 5/22/13 ~ C.37 - For Better or Wor

Chancing a guess: nobody is smiling when you arrest them, and smiling also contorts your face so you might look different to someone reviewing the image. Outside of that, I have no clue...
by Helbereth
Sat Jun 01, 2013 5:06 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Newton's Laws (Mutou fic)
Replies: 11
Views: 3230

Re: Newton's Laws (Mutou fic)

Mirage_GSM wrote:The author hasn't been online for more than three months.
I think our well-intentioned tips aren't reaching him...
Huh... I didn't even see the dates... Someone went digging up a necro, I guess.
by Helbereth
Fri May 31, 2013 8:35 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Newton's Laws (Mutou fic)
Replies: 11
Views: 3230

Re: Newton's Laws (Mutou fic)

A slight overreaction of his heart, or a slight bump to his chest could Did you mean to finish that sentence? (If not, end it in ...) That "..." is the fifth common punctuation mark used almost exclusively in dialogue (within quotes), known as an ellipse. It's usually used to indicate a pause in sp...
by Helbereth
Fri May 31, 2013 3:15 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Newton's Laws (Mutou fic)
Replies: 11
Views: 3230

Re: Newton's Laws (Mutou fic)

I park my car and enter the school grounds, I make my way to the faculty building, along the way many students have started their morning activities, It's still 30 minutes before class starts, so it's not surprising that they took their time to jog, study, eat, or just hang out with friends in the ...
by Helbereth
Thu May 30, 2013 10:33 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Miki and Taro: Rat Race
Replies: 101
Views: 29955

Re: Miki and Taro: Rat Race

DanjaDoom wrote:"Fuck it's almost four o'clock normal people should be asleep right now but I'm too excited because my new laptop is coming in tomorrow fuck it I'll finish this chapter up lol idgaf."
Minus the part about the laptop, you've just described virtually every night of my life for the past year...