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Okay... Yes, everything Helbereth just wrote is correct, but nobody - not even Helbereth I think - expects you to write like that on your first story. Getting this good is going to take years of practice. So try to take from his post what you can, but don't sweat it if your story doesn't read like ...

If you continue to edit subsequent chapters to the opening post, you're very unlikely to get further feedback... What he said. I don't think anyone had any idea this had been updated since its original posting. Nobody is going to lynch you for replying to your own thread, especially if it's to add ...

Okay, I'm gonna try and be as nice as possible, but this is painful. There are a few sparks of brilliance in the way you've set your protagonist up for an unrequited love conflict. That's something I haven't actually seen among the fan fictions here, so kudos on the (maybe) original thought. Don't s...

"I have an odd rule about throw-away characters -- I hate them with a burning passion. I'd rather have people think only the named characters exist than fill the world with faceless bystanders who contribute nothing but wall-dressing." The you of 17 months ago would have loved Cross†Channel. I have...

As I'm writing in a serialised format, from the point of view of one character, a lot of things happen without the story commenting on them - because Hisao is unaware of (or at least not paying attention to) their occurrence. Believe me when I tell you that I'm well aware of this, having spent the ...

future unreal conditional The greatest benefit of not having a college education is that I've learned these concepts without ever knowing their frightening names. Also, calendars. Not getting the reference. Little help? I believe the good professor is implying that this is the day Emi goes into the...

Mental image: a 5-volume box set of Tomorrow's Doom books. The girl in my avatar has three of them ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~> Also, this might sort of break the established structure, but it would probably be four volumes rather than five. Act 1 and 2 are essentially one act, and they're only separate...

I really like how you have fleshed out your side characters to the point to where classifying them as 'side characters' is an inaccurate assessment. One of my chief goals from the beginning was to write an ensemble rather than just a two-character story. All those peripheral characters work as litt...

Hanako didn't recognize the tall red-haired girl working alongside her. Oh, hello there Yoko. It must seem a little odd that I put them working together in this after my recent chapter of TD, but... yeah, I'm not explaining that. I can't wait for the resolution. Calling it now, Hanako will try some...

Past a rounded corner, she found Natsume and Naomi standing in front of a big mirror having some alterations done to their cute, green-and-white-striped elf costumes. They each waved at Hanako, and she responded in kind, but the girls were quickly discouraged from moving or breathing; moving canvase...

Foreword: Okay, so... here's what happened. In all honesty, I have no idea; it really shouldn't be surprising that writing almost 30,000 words in what amounted to five days didn't pan out. The first four parts basically just flew onto the page, and I really liked the length and breadth of their con...

Although not entirely accurate, since I'm willing to bet most people read it here. Well, yes. I know for fact that most of my readers probably do so here, largely because this is where I've posted everything first, and the same probably goes for Leaty. In my case, I had only posted the first 7 chap...

Leaty wrote:The former. It's buried in the profile settings.

An author can view a traffic graph that shows visitors and views, broken down by chapter. This is the view off my TD posting there(the other 24 chapters are out of view):

Also, by the end of this there should be a leather-bound hardback version of this available for purchase. I'd shell out a goodly amount of money for that. That's kind of you both to say, though I don't think I can monetize this in any way. Far as it departs from the source material, this is still f...

Glad to see a new update, amazing there are stories here that have been going more than a year and are still being updated So, you're saying I should abandon this lost cause? Today, my English teacher used the term 'empirical data'. Hard not to laugh my ass off. Goddamn it Helbereth. Unusual euphem...