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I don't think this was originally supposed to be Hanako, but I'll put this here anyway.

This is an interesting and new idea. I don't think I've ever seen the origin of the fire tied into outright murder before and stories about the girls first years are rare as well. I can understand how some people might think it's a bit too dark, it does bring in criminal drama into a series that mos...

Oh, not really. I'm just adding layers. There will be plenty of doubt on each character's shoulders after the next (and last!) part, much like after all the other authors' chapters. I really do have to thank Oddball for allowing us the creative path of 'do whatever we want' with a touch of 'smack t...

At one point, Hanako would visit Lilly's room for company but had yet to come up with the nerve to actually talk to her. Once Lilly told Akira about this, Akira used to jokingly say that maybe her room was hanuted and referred to the mystery girl as “the Ghost”. On rare occasions, Akira still calls ...

So, I read maybe half of this story before eventually just giving up on it. Now the plot is interesting, it's well written for the most part. Although earlier chapters it seemed like the prose was a bit too flowery, giving it a somewhat forced feel to it, you seemed to have gotten a better hang of i...

I can't really fault a guy for not telling the truth to somebody that doesn't want to hear it. That wasn't any small detail like trying a new food or telling the same old bad jokes, she should have recorded that in her journal right away. The fact that she didn't tells me that she didn't want to rem...

brythain wrote:Hey, man, you need to separate the Naomi/Hisao/Hanako bits more clearly. I had to re-read lines a bit just to get that.

Sorry. Formatting didn't carry over.

It's fixed now.

Author's Note: ... I'm not happy with this one, but I've spent too much time on it to waste it. Maybe somebody will like it, or better yet, maybe somebody will get some ideas from this and come up with something better. Hospital Epilogue Reports of the Incident according to Naomi I am officially per...

Nice. The narration feels a bit detached and that threw me at first, but in the end, I think it actually helps add more emmotional impact to how things played out.

One thing I forgot to add.

I loved the little detail about how Emi didn't want to run professionally, she's not the best and Miki could have beat her with just a little more effort. Too many writers treat her like he's the fastest thing ever.

Munchenhausen wrote:

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This is some Brythain-tier stuff going on here

Brythain, do you want to be the one insulted by that, or do you want me to be?

He asked for permission of course, but if he had to get permission to use Hanako's likeness, shouldn't he have also asked RAITA for his blessing? The poster is using one of Hanako's KS designs (the hat, at the very least, being a Weee creation), but the placement of Hanako's scars, the color of her...