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by Oddball
Fri Aug 09, 2019 7:16 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Saviors from the Flames
Replies: 12
Views: 876

Re: Saviors from the Flames

Generally people here don't like having to go to another site to read things. Why don't you just post your story here?
by Oddball
Sun Aug 04, 2019 3:02 pm
Forum: Public Discussion
Topic: Ask!
Replies: 4943
Views: 762488

Re: Ask!

Lilly gets around campus unaided and she's completely blind.
by Oddball
Sat Aug 03, 2019 11:39 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Footprints in the Snow - A Fanfiction
Replies: 11
Views: 679

Re: Footprints in the Snow - A Fanfiction

The story sends up a lot of warnings to me. Foreign student, shares many of Hisao's traits... so far though it's nothing horrible. The narrator shift between the first and part of the story and when he has his accident is a bit abrupt though. I'm also curious why you gave his girlfriend essentially ...
by Oddball
Fri Aug 02, 2019 11:37 pm
Forum: Public Discussion
Topic: Ask!
Replies: 4943
Views: 762488

Re: Ask!

"Legally blind" is not the same as completely blind. Kenji can see. He just has really really poor vision.
by Oddball
Fri Aug 02, 2019 11:07 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Their Future - A Shizune Epilogue (Contains some NSFW) [DISCONTINUED]
Replies: 18
Views: 1025

Re: Their Future - A Shizune Epilogue (Contains some NSFW)

I think the closing line about this being home would have worked better if you hadn't already used it when he first arrived.

Other than that, there's not enough here to really judge by yet.
by Oddball
Wed Jul 31, 2019 9:53 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Chris' Saki One Shots
Replies: 14
Views: 1828

Re: Fallen Leaves & Broken Clocks

Nice story. Shot put very powerful and emotional. Her response that Hisao had been reading too much poetry was a nice one that adds just a slight taste of humor to it. I'm not so sure I like the last line where he say "Saki, I'll see you again soon." i think the story works well enough as being a me...
by Oddball
Mon Jul 29, 2019 7:47 pm
Forum: Fan Art
Topic: I post things here occassionally.
Replies: 105
Views: 26793

Re: I post things here occassionally.

I see nothing wrong with it.

What's her shirt say?


oh, and I love the ball Lily picture.
by Oddball
Thu Jul 25, 2019 3:33 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: The Sands of Time
Replies: 11
Views: 795

Re: The Sands of Time

It's not Mutou's class, it's his class, and Mutou is not teaching just there but everywhere a class currently has science on their timetable. You do have a point. While Mutou taught in other classes, this was still his home room class. Hisao going there and expecting to see Mutou again and finding ...
by Oddball
Tue Jul 23, 2019 6:48 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: The Sands of Time
Replies: 11
Views: 795

The Sands of Time

Chapter 1: School Days The bell rings and school is officially out for the day. However there's still quite a few people more interested in asking questions to the famous guest speaker than they are in leaving. The questions go on for another fifteen minutes before Misha stands up. She politely but ...
by Oddball
Tue Jul 23, 2019 9:08 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Riposte (Rika Story) (Completed)
Replies: 46
Views: 3364

Re: Riposte (Rika Story) (Updated 7-12-19)

I don't see how you can deny that Hisao at least makes some questionable decisions regarding sex. But if you legitimately think his judgment is sound in every route/path regarding sex then fair enough I guess. He does, but so does every other single character in the game. I don't consider that a de...
by Oddball
Sun Jul 21, 2019 11:51 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Riposte (Rika Story) (Completed)
Replies: 46
Views: 3364

Re: Riposte (Rika Story) (Updated 7-12-19)

Hanako Fancopter requested a more detailed and in depth view on my opinions on this piece, so here it is. Considering he said he knew I wasn't going to like it from the beginning, I have no idea why he wants this, but it's not going to hurt me to play along. While you talked about doing an edgy Rika...
by Oddball
Sat Jul 20, 2019 9:52 am
Forum: Public Discussion
Topic: AxP - Who's your hero?
Replies: 2
Views: 360

Re: AxP - Who's your hero?

Given how short these videos are, they're surprisingly packed with character and emotion. It's very inspiring work.
by Oddball
Tue Jul 16, 2019 11:48 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Shiina 2
Replies: 11
Views: 1023

Re: Shiina 2

That was a nice, short, but emotionally powerful story. I honestly don't think I have ever read a story that covers these events as they occur. Usually they're just mentioned as having happened in the past, if they're mentioned at all. The fact that Misha went to Lilly for help is an interesting ide...
by Oddball
Tue Jul 16, 2019 10:17 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: NuclearStudent's Story Repository
Replies: 37
Views: 2052

Re: Contest Entry: "Burnt Woman Burns Body"

It's an effective horror piece, actually, it's a pretty dark good horror story. It's just that as a KS piece it's really lacking.
by Oddball
Sat Jul 13, 2019 12:09 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Riposte (Rika Story) (Completed)
Replies: 46
Views: 3364

Re: Riposte (Rika Story) (Updated 7-12-19)

That's what I'm saying, you're complaining that he's not "in character," but I have no idea what he is "supposed" to be in this sense aside from a boring audience stand-in Like I said, you don't know who he's supposed to be. Basically you're making up a new character and calling him Hisao. To an ex...