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https://i.imgur.com/sGUCaOc.png There's a handful of stories on the plate today. I'm including them all not just because they're by the same author, but because they're all on the same page. That ... and because I've missed some updates in the club. Sorry. Life has been weird for me lately. With th...

Not bad. I think Rin was perhaps a bit too blunt at times, but nothing that ruined the story.

I'd cut out the opening author's note though. You explain Hisao and his roommate situation well enough in the story that it's not needed.

Nicely done. Short, but it doesn't really feel short. It gets a lot of character across in a very small period of time.

Great work.

"lesbian sleeper agent" I just love that.

I think the pace might be a bit too fast. There are a few scenes where we hear about what happened without having seen it, and those usually sound like they would have been good scenes.

Still, I do give you props for Misaki. She comes off as a good strong and unique character.

It is kind of a shame that inverted Hisao never had a chance to show up.

For purely scientific purposes, I must know the source of that naked Meiko sprite.

The regular Meiko sprite, some editing, and this sprite.

edit: yes. I see the typo in the last picture, but I didn't save this layers for this one so I can't go back and fix it without more work than I care to put into it.

https://i.imgur.com/sGUCaOc.png Phantom Pains: Mirror Shoujo by by swampie2. Last time we did two short ones. Now it's time for a slightly longer one. It's 13 chapters, but they're short so it's still a quick read. The story itself starts really good. I love the inverted style of the characters. It...

Well, that was cute.

Interesting. I wasn't sure from the tone at first whether this was supposed to be taken seriously nor not. I think it comes off a bit to dry for parody, but too out of character for anything serious. Also, I'd suggest using the line about the dark haired track girl to the very end. It seems to be th...

That's probably the only mention of cleaning duty in the game. There's no scenes of it and plenty of scenes where everybody just gets up and leaves after class.

Hanako still might be a tad too social, but it's not too far out of the realm of believability and so far Angus is a much better character by leaps and bounds.