Katawa Shoujo Forums

For the most part, I love how you handled the cast. Except for Miki. Big Sexy? Snoozu? Gaylord? I pretty much hate your Miki. My world has certainly grown smaller in the past months. This strike me as an odd line to think right before he starts on how his world is expanding. I enjoyed the scene wher...

I'm curious to hear your reaction to some of the other bad endings when you get them.

... Yes. I actually did the second picture first. I changed the text color but forgot to change the name.

... I mean... I don't have the slightest clue what you're talking about.

I'd proof read it a few more times if I were you, and I say that as somebody who is horrible about proof reading.

Also some of your paragraphs tend to drag on when they could easily be split into smaller ones.

Good except for the little white outfit around Rin where you had to tilt her. What I would have done personally there is select the area Rin ISN'T in, expand it by a pixel or so and feather the edges. You'll have to play with the feathering a little bit to get the right result but it usually helps o...

You're going to have to do some serious work to convince me Rin and Akira could ever be a couple. This felt more like a shock/joke ending than anything that actually makes sense.

That Rin model looks awesome. How big is it?

https://i.imgur.com/sGUCaOc.png Pictures of Lilly by Andonymos. It's that time again! Here we have a short Sad Lilly story. There's a bit of awkward phrasing here and there and I'm not sure Lilly would even want to see, but for the most part it's a wonderfully written piece. It does make me curious...

That's some very nice line work you've done there.

Great job.

Sadly, you are limited to three pictures a post so you can't add more.

There are some, but if I wrote them out for you they wouldn't be unwritten anymore.

But if you are going to change the date, let the readers know early on. I'd also suggest checking out the tips for fanfiction topic.

... would it help if I said I was sorry?

(Not that I've ever made any chocolate jokes.)

Nowhere in the game does it imply she has any fear or hatred of fire. Anyway, To add to your list .... The World I Know - by Collective Soul Gotta Knock a Little Harder - by the Seatbelts (from the Cowboy Bebop soundtrack) The Hard Way - by Mary Chapmin Carpenter Golden Slumbers/Carry that Weight by...

Nice work. I enjoyed how you handled the contrasts between Rin and Shizune's personalities. You really don't see them interact too often in stories and you especially don't see them getting along.

https://i.imgur.com/sGUCaOc.png This time around we take a look at a story called Silence Falls by WiseSilver. Going by the title, you can probably guess who the story is about. (If you guessed Nomiya you're wrong.) The story is abit more pruple prose style that I tend to enjoy, giving it sort of a...