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Anyway, being an OC thread, I've actually put a lot of thought into one of my own, and I'm going to post it at the risk of looking like a fool. I'm likewise making a new post, since the whole effort is a bit futile if nobody sees it, and who knows, maybe the thread will actually be revived. Well, h...

So, let's do something a little bit more light this time. Ever watch Quantum Leap? Well, that's what's going to happen. For 30 days you will take the place of the character of your choice with the goal of making at leas one person's life better that it currently is. The rest of the people will see, ...

Ah, a post on feedback. That leads perfectly into what I wanted to share. Fenimore Cooper's Literary Offences . This contains some very valuable writing lessons, some great examples of what not to do, and is probably one of the more entertaining reviews that you're ever likely to read. It's written ...

Let's compare writing to ... oh let's say a car for example. Now, if you know how a car works, how it's built, and what parts do what parts do what, you can start to modify it. You can replace parts with other things, remove things that you don't need, and replace certain parts with other things tha...

Is it time for a new scenario yet?

If nobody else has one, I got something.

It's a good thing I've got the ending to this coming up in a few days. Everybody's starting to notice my old plot holes.

The very least I can do is give you new plot holes to notice.

- Almost certainly the ambulance will be at your place faster than you will be at the hospital. No idea as to the truth of this, but I've heard that in Japan, ambulances call the hospitals to see if there's room for the patient before going there and if there isn't, they end up calling another hosp...

You have some tense issues, seemingly slipping from past tense to present quite often. I'm bad at that myself though, so I can't complain too much there. You also need to check your capitalization. The script fic aspects don't help much either. Your detached style of omniscient narration gives me th...

Why do people put up long author's notes explaining the story before people get a chance to actually read it?

Other than then note, what you wrote seems fairly good so far. I just hope it's not one of those stories where absolutely everybody comes back to teach at Yamaku.

1. Name (optional) : Alan Bates 2. Gender: Male 3. Age: 32 4. What is the estimate amount of time you spend on your computer: Most of it. 5. Do you read books often? Not as much as I used to. 5.1. If so, how many per year? several. I don't keep count 6. What kind of movie do you like? Horror 7. What...

Let me toss a few things out at you and see if anything inspires you. You're worried about him just asking Lilly and Hanako questions about Akira if they hang out together? So, give them something else to do or talk about it. Lilly did say that Hisao was better at math and science than her. Maybe sh...

Well, it seemed rather obvious that you wrote it without getting any sleep. The whole thing felt like a dream somebody else was trying to describe to me without having a firm grasp of English. I'm sure it all made sen to you, but I was left scratching my head or rolling my eyes just as often as not....

My dad's leg was blown off in Vietnam, one of my old girlfriends was covered in burn scars from the neck down, and one of my best friends was born without the the use of her legs. I also went to school with a guy that had two prosthetic legs and five fingers total. Three on one hand, two on the other.

Apparently I missed a chapter when I commented earlier somehow, so now that I've read it, I have a few actual on topic comments to make. The story itself holds great promise. I enjoy your take on Mutou and I really love how Hisao is written as having never came out of the depression he went into at ...

Hanako decides to go outside? Sure, why not? She found someone else to love? Go ahead. They demand how they came to be? Sure, I'll tell them face to face. Shizune decides to take over the house? Now that I'll reconsider. Why would I need an artificial woman to tell me that she can do better? There'...