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One of these days I'm going to write a story without any huge glaring errors.

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Okay, probably not, but it's a nice thought.

Missing an "I" - just like your OC

Hey! She's only mostly an original character.

I'll get on the fixes after work.

Part 8 “Wahahaha! It's the first day of school! Everybody wake up!” a voice in the hall yells. I roll over and look at my alarm clock. It's six in the morning. This is way too early to get up. I decide then and there that I will dedicate the rest of my life to destroying this person … unless I chang...

Just got around to reading this myself (as others in the thread have said, I had put it off due to what I feared the content may have been).

The slightly misleading title and radical tone shift from the first chapter was intentional. I wanted to keep people off guard.

Glad you enjoyed it. I tried to keep the characters mostly in character for the majority of the story. I thought the humor worked better when placed against their normal behavior, but in some cases it's debatable as to whether I succeeded or not.

Jobriq wrote:wait Obama is in Japan?

Yes. With Kamen Rider and they;'re eating ramen. Pay attention.

That's even better than I imagined it. Shizune's expression is just perfect.

I really didn't like how Hisao kept trying to dodge Student Council work all through Act I. I didn't like how everytime Shizune and Misha had speaking lines they were trying to recruit him for the student council or make him do work for them, even after he says he doesn't want to or isn't intereste...

Not so much a "tip" but a preference sort of thing, when writing a story with multiple parts, try to condense the posts when you can. I may be alone in this matter, but from my experience, it's more enjoyable 2-3 long walls of text as opposed to 10 or so little bricks that you have to scroll around...

I can easily imagine every single character of Katawa Shoujo in real life. None of them would look that strange, most of them actually "boring" and average. With the exception of Jigoro. A real life Jigoro would... well, look like a typical fantasy anime character. In an attempt to prove a point, I...

I've been reading fan fiction and erotic fiction for quite a while, and I've always wanted to attempt to capture the magic that good fan fiction can create

I hesitate to call this either good or erotic. I will, however, say this is certainly "What the hell?"

Keep in mind, we also don't know how much influence her mother had on her. She's never mentioned in the game. Heck, she 's got less than ten pictures in the shimmie.

As far as Shizune and Jigoro go, I'd say that it's very obvious that Shizune takes after her father. Look at the way she talks to the other girls in the game. She's very stubborn in her beliefs and opinions and seems to occupy the mindset that if somebody isn't like her, then there's something wrong...

That said, I thought it kinda went against the general style of KS. With so many feels and detailed planning, the manly picnic felt silly. Perhaps that was the intention.

I think "silly" is exactly what they were going for. Kenji isn't exactly the most serious character after all.

Nice work.