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Dream wrote:Makes me wonder exactly how akward the parent/doctor conversation went.

Doctor wrote:So a few other daily dosages are 40 mgs. of Ibunoprofen and 50 mgs. of Sildenafil.

Fixed that for you. Prescription Viagra is known as Sildenafil. It's the same product, just with a less stigmatised name.

All done with Hive's interview. Dunno if Kutagh wants crud's too. Not Kutaght but i admit i would appreciate it. Cpl_Crud's australian accent can be rather hard on a non-native :lol: Really? Obviously as an Australian myself I find the accent easy to understand, but I also find it easy to understan...

You should be proud of them.

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I'm not even sorry.

So, this looks like poetry, you say? Or a song, even? Huh. That's weird. Even the use of the word, "stanza", is weirding me out. It's actually a set of six drabbles. The formatting changed somewhat upon transferal from MS Word to here, mostly because it looked like balls here, but I'd thought I'd ma...

Hurt I hurt myself today, to see if I still feel. After I heard what had happened, everything seemed to go numb. The pain is the only thing that feels real now. There was a chance you weren’t repulsed by me. I know I ran away, but I wanted to stay. I wanted to give you a chance. And now that chance...

There's still a lot of tense issues and misused or even missing punctuation. There are several instances of run on sentences, particularly towards the start. Also, when referring to characters, you tend to alternate between first- and last-name descriptions. Japanese people tend to use last names ex...

if he's asked you to stop multiple times, maybe you should stop completely since he obviously doesn't like the word rather than just putting the word on hold until the next week just saying For a guy who uses the word himself as often as if not more often than us, I would be inclined to think he is...

Mirage_GSM wrote:Also: Another story with choice points...

Agreed. We had a choice like one or two scenes ago. It seems too soon to have another one. Also, another one with an overabundance of misplaced and arguably unnecessary similies and pop culture references.

Doomish wrote:I'm not sure I understand. The sentence continues after that! :V

Um. I don't know. I could have sworn there was a line break there before or something. But there's nothing now. Perhaps my mind is playing tricks on me.

she's alrady walking away Caught that for you. I hastily fold the envelope back up and stumble away from the table. Len Mao leans back in his chair; I catch a glimpse of him checking his watch yet again as I disappear back up the stairs. A man has come into the lobby wearing formal blue to contrast...

Huh. I've seen that film a thousand times, so I'm a little surprised the name didn't ring a bell. Perhaps I should read the graphic novel as well; it appears her character is more prominent there.

That was beautiful, man. I don't really know what else to say.

Nine Hundred and Ninety-Nine We played many games of Risk, you and I. You won most of them. Most of the time it was less about who won or lost, and more about how badly you beat me. There was the odd time here and there that I would come from behind to snuff out your army, and I never let you forge...

The jocks thing was weird. It seemed kinda out of place and awkward. Though, considering the situation, I can't imagine there's a non-awkward way to write awkwardness, so I guess just work on the flow there I guess? Not sure what to tell you about it honestly; it's like a single tile of bone amidst...

Nook Condominiums? As in Tom Nook? GODDAMNIT AKIRA YOU'LL NEVER PAY OFF YOUR MORTGAGE. The jocks thing was weird. It seemed kinda out of place and awkward. Though, considering the situation, I can't imagine there's a non-awkward way to write awkwardness, so I guess just work on the flow there I gues...