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Likewise to Hanako and Rin's path, which can both end abruptly if Hisao is too blunt, I'm thinking that Act IV will be where something happens that causes Rika to realize that her outlook on life is more or less screwed up.

Hisao's lookin' awfully smug there.

I'm strangely appreciative of how you didn't portray Hisao as some Virgin Sex God like the visual novel and accompanying fanfics do. Can't say why, though.

All in all, good work as always.

Katsuro looks pretty swag, but Naomi is kind of scaring me.

Spoiler: MC ends up with the childhood friend.

Since not a lot of depth is put into most of the classmates' personalities, it's hard to say. Perhaps Takashi is yandere for Molly? (Male yandere? #_#)

BobBobberson wrote:Left 4 the Half-Fortress

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Oh, you. Silliness aside, I'm glad you decided to expand on this, I'm liking it so far (despite not being familiar with Yozora's series).

I really liked it. Simple and elegant, no bells and whistles attached. Not to say that bells and whistles are bad... but it's a nice change of pace from other things I've read on here as of late.

I don't know how you manage to pump out so much different material Doomish, so I can hardly complain if you're a little out of steam.

Does this by any chance link to this......? http://ks.renai.us/viewtopic.php?f=52&t=3319&p=60958#p60958 No. This is completely separate from my other works. This will reference none of them, and none of them will reference it. I'm not sure what connection you're making anyway. Hisao's concern that ...

Here we go.

I tried very hard to imagine what it would be like (something I usually struggle to do), and passed the scene by a very close friend of mine who is, well, more experienced than me, for a fact-checking of sorts. It's about as close as you can get to realistic for a fanfic. You played out Katsuro's i...

Probably the same reason why nobody calls the Lilly "good" ending the "canon" ending.

*dodges rocks*

Ah, now I remember that line.

It's funny how it sounds so much more depressing when quoted out of context though.

This part definitely reads better than the last two, but it's good that you're able to spot the issues yourself. As for the story, I thought it was nice how you got Hisao to get Hanako's attention again. Something subtle that wouldn't chase her off. However, the ending felt rushed - Hisao showing he...

Ironically the Misha art caught my eye more than the article itself.