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by gecko
Sat Feb 04, 2012 8:52 am
Forum: Public Discussion
Topic: Emi panties (spoilers for Emi & Rin)
Replies: 1
Views: 1181

Emi panties (spoilers for Emi & Rin)

Sorry if this has already been discussed, but I love those little shout-outs from one path to another. In Emi's path, you learn that her favourite colour is blue. In Rin's act 2, she explains you that a girl's panties are her soul. Then, in Rin's act 4, buried into a very emotional scene, Rin tells ...
by gecko
Sat Feb 04, 2012 8:30 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: A view from the dark (Feedback appreciated!)
Replies: 33
Views: 5068

Re: A view from the dark (Feedback appreciated!)

Same problems with the diary. Although I see you added some new information into them, it's still a lot of repetition. That information could have been introduced without the diaries. Another point: you should introduce line breaks in dialogues before the speaker changes, or it becomes confusing to ...
by gecko
Fri Feb 03, 2012 5:40 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: The Lamb and The Fox
Replies: 83
Views: 20424

Act 1 - Scene 3

"What's the colour of a black hole?" Rin finally breaks the silence. "Isn't it black?" Mio asks. "In that book," Rin answers, "the man says it's not. Because a black hole has a temperature, so it must glow... Not in the right frequency for human eyes, but I still need to paint it... I suppose the pr...
by gecko
Fri Feb 03, 2012 5:34 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Weekend at Hisao's (Was: At the Train Station) - [Some Porn]
Replies: 201
Views: 104932

Re: Weekend at Hisao's (Was: At the Train Station) - [Some P

Arg, I misread! Then, I still stand on my OOC feelings. Hisao and Shizune are teens, they've got the stamina. And Hisao has been seeing his girl winning the party and all dressed-up and sexy, and Shizune must be feeling very pleased with herself... Oh well, you're the writer, you don't have to confo...
by gecko
Fri Feb 03, 2012 5:06 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Weekend at Hisao's (Was: At the Train Station) - [Some Porn]
Replies: 201
Views: 104932

Re: Weekend at Hisao's (Was: At the Train Station) - [Some P

If it was for me, I'd edit that sex scene out of the first chapter, reserving it for the XXX side stories I don't agree. The train station scene was good at establishing the mood. And, after such a triumph as in the last chapter, I felt that them just going to sleep was OOC - glad to see there was ...
by gecko
Thu Feb 02, 2012 5:07 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Weekend at Hisao's (Was: At the Train Station) - [Some Porn]
Replies: 201
Views: 104932

Re: Weekend at Hisao's (Was: At the Train Station) - [Some P

There's one path where he writes back... I think it was Lilly's, but I'm not sure. In Shizune's path, he doesn't write back, though Kenji tries to convince him to. That's what I thought: I went back and reread a few scenes through the Library and couldn't find something that indicated he'd written ...
by gecko
Wed Feb 01, 2012 5:50 pm
Forum: Public Discussion
Topic: What else made you cry?
Replies: 270
Views: 27717

Re: What else made you cry?

I won't mention music, or this post will be very long and I'll forget half of it, but about the rest: UP: +1 for the marriage montage BSG: the scene where they fake Hera's death in season 2 (or not? But I'm sure I shed a tear at one point of the first seasons Helo/Athena arc) Le roi et l'oiseau: the...
by gecko
Wed Feb 01, 2012 5:00 pm
Forum: Public Discussion
Topic: nomiya
Replies: 51
Views: 9130

Re: nomiya

I didn't dislike Nomiya before the end, when he yells at Rin. I agree with Kenobi's rant, although I hadn't thought of it like that. And yes, Nomiya's kind of pushy, but it goes with the job. Past the elementary stages, where you can concentrate on technical skills, a teacher has to make sure his st...
by gecko
Tue Jan 31, 2012 6:45 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Five Drabbles, Post-Hisao
Replies: 18
Views: 5326

Re: Five Drabbles, Post-Hisao

Re: Shizune: take a look at her last name. I had seen it actually. My writing about a student was not really what I meant (sorry, it's late, I'm tired) It's just that in my mind, Shizune would have been the strong business woman in the couple, and Hisao just another science teacher. So to name the ...
by gecko
Tue Jan 31, 2012 6:34 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Weekend at Hisao's (Was: At the Train Station) - [Some Porn]
Replies: 201
Views: 104932

Re: Weekend at Hisao's (Was: At the Train Station) - [Some P

Wow, that one started okay but... just nice and funny?
And then, it's been building and building, up to the point where we now have a real plot, and I'm waiting eagerly for the next episode! You're a sneaky writer, sir.
by gecko
Tue Jan 31, 2012 6:21 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Five Drabbles, Post-Hisao
Replies: 18
Views: 5326

Re: Five Drabbles, Post-Hisao

Yes, I really liked Hanako's and Rin's. Shizune's bothered me a bit, because I think she would find a more efficient name for her foundation than an obscure student, she'd probably think about him, find ways to remember him, but giving her foundation his name? Emi's bothered me for the nine months. ...
by gecko
Tue Jan 31, 2012 6:12 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: New Experiences
Replies: 81
Views: 14545

Re: New Experiences

Typo warning: to be off my feet
by gecko
Sat Jan 28, 2012 10:36 am
Forum: Public Discussion
Topic: The Hanako Thread - Spoilers, obviously
Replies: 641
Views: 84520

Re: The Hanako Thread - Spoilers, obviously

A lot of people are taking extreme positions in this debate, and you might not understand each-other because of it. So I'll try and repeat (again) my middle of the road position: Yes, Hanako had planned for sex to happen. Yes, Hisao is a virgin teenager seeing his girlfriend naked for the first time...
by gecko
Sat Jan 28, 2012 10:16 am
Forum: Public Discussion
Topic: Rin's Path discussion *spoilers*
Replies: 729
Views: 117598

Re: Rin's Path discussion *spoilers*

You don't get the "bad" (officially neutral) end just by supporting her art. The turning point is when you misunderstand her after her break-down in the gallery. When you push her to feel happy that people are asking questions about her paintings, when she's made it clear she's not. Although I'd mis...
by gecko
Fri Jan 27, 2012 6:44 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: The Lamb and The Fox
Replies: 83
Views: 20424

Act 1 - Scene 2

Mio ~ Ken's birthday tonight: let's crash his rehearsal! Hisao ~ I'm included? Mio ~ Of course! That text message caught me by surprise. Okay, after a couple hours dancing near her – if you can call that barely moving in rhythm I did dancing – and a beer offered by Ken, I had given Mio my phone num...