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...Writing the date chapter to end all date chapters is surprisingly hard. Especially with limited knowledge. So, anybody got any advice for this? Own experiences to share? Anything? Dinner and a movie. Hanako hasn't had the chance to really experience the cinema before since the orphanage probably...

I can certainly change it, but I thought that making him dispose of it when he got to his room would be more indicative of the fact that his mind was on other things immediately post-coitus, and that disposing of it would be analogous to his crazy epiphany or whatever you'd like to call it.

Silentcook wrote:You're kinda late with your condom disposal, mate.

For a while I forgot to have a line mentioning its disposal at all. This means he was technically wearing it through all of Part 4.

Apparently she's able to lie about quite a bit in this story. I don't recall writing any flat-out lies within the story. Only the stuff prior to it like the Newspaper Club and all that shit. And something else, but that -while not particularly important to the plot- is for another time. I made sure...

On the bad side; from your comment,s you seem to not have intended to emphasis the sex as much, but you sure seem to mention it quite a bit. Maybe if you talked more about what else she got out of that relationship and less about how much she enjoyed the sex, your intentions on those scenes would b...

It just doesn't work. If we saw a pattern of failed efforts, maybe. How would you (and anyone else here) respond to a prequel to Mendacium? A series of short stories detailing how things began to fall apart, and showing how Hisao was ignorant to the fact, as opposed to me trying to tell the reader ...

>On the general responses Well, gee, I was expecting the backlash to be immense at first, and then calm down later as things were explained... but it looks like it started out kind of weak and then grew steadily as the story went on. Is this a testament to the characters' reactions, or my own explan...

@nemz A lot of that stuff you said is very true, but there's a thing or two I'd like to address >the pill and condom deal this was kind of meant to show that Hisao really can't trust her anymore. Technically, none of this is relevant to the plot from this point on, so I don't have much of a problem ...

You ask for opinions, then completely disregard everything said and get defensive... >implying every post deserves a response >implying I'm not trying to explain hisao's reasoning to the dissenters I know it's not a good thing if I have to do this sort of thing outside of the prose, but hell if I'm...

>help girl get better >have a friendly break-up >two years later, instead of sitting at home (like she would do if she were still a shut-in), she goes out >gets hit by a bus >Hisao crie dat dere be his folt Seriously. Hisao could then write shitty philosophical treatises pertaining to causality. >u...

Part 3 is now up. Enjoy~

Oh, and PLEASE let me know if you think it was executed well. I don't want to have another master of romance on my hands.

If I were you I'd take all the times you hit enter and hit enter twice instead

Makes it a lot easier to read

Like the reason for cheating on Hisao to begin with: Moar, longer sex That's a reason, yes, but I tried to make it clear in the first chapter that she also wanted to feel like she wasn't subhuman, and that she wasn't restricted to relationships with other subhumans (in this case, someone with a fuc...

Flesh-Puppet wrote:I think the best option here is to at least attempt support.

As does Hisao. But if I make him so that he's like I'LL STILL LUV U 4EVER NO MATTER WHAT then I'll alienate a shitton of people who will no longer be able to understand what he is and will be feeling.

@Nameless Some of those songs you've mentioned are set to appear in part 4, and while you seem to have some really good advice, I'm kind of in a funk right now for some reason, so I'll probably hold off on making any immediate edits to any of the songs for a while @Bagheera As much as I'd like to di...