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Well, the Mom in that Emi fic was a bit more extreme... This one is keeping it civil at least.

And where did you get that picture? Those breasts are larger than her head each ^^°

For everyone who has trouble keeping their tenses and narrative voices straight - this story is an excellent showcase of what pitfalls to avoid!

This story should be linked to in the Tips for Fanfction Writers thread.
A lot of writers could learn a thing or three about narration from this...

Highlight of the chapter: "...this week."

Okay, if you included Fan-Art characters it's no wonder I don't recognize them - I tend to not visit that subforum at all... Of those six I could place only Thisbe* - though I thought the misspelling might have been intentional - and I read the Secret Santa story, but I wouldn't have placed her name...

This story get a whole stack of Get-Out-Of-Jail-Free-Cards for incorrect tenses and PoV inconsistencies :-) It's been a while since I read a story with so many laughs per minute... Too bad there are so many characters I don't remember ever reading about. And there's even an author getting a cameo ro...

One thing I never expected this story to be - after reading who wrote it - is "generic" :lol: If you go in with that expectation, you can see where the story is headed quite early - but you can't help your reputation, can you? Did you use autocorrect? There are a few words in there that look like th...

Given that one of the fanfic's involving her is written by a 4leaf member... I consider that one head cannon...

Oohhh...
I sure hope we're not supposed to consider all fanfictions written by 4LS members to be canon... That would be... pedagogically inappropriate...

Her face is a treat as I appear before her.

Wait, if Misha is in the breast pocket, and the camera is facing forward - how can she see Shizune's face - or what she's signing for that matter?

Cute story otherwise

Ah, The Jigoro ... 8) A bit late to the party, but I put this off for a few days so I could read it in one go. Excellent chapter as always! I could be wrong, but aren't Rin and Lilly the only ones that have a kiss outside of a sex scene? No, Emi and (of course) Hanako have those as well - Emi when s...

At first I thoght this would be a Saki-piece. I've never seen a depiction of Natume's condition being quite this severe... It reminded me of this scene : "Point is: if I were a lesbian, I probably wouldn't have done what I just did. I would have felt like a creep. This was simply a little nursing ch...

Really? I don't think so. If you wrote that fic about Space Hisao who is Meiko's son, then I wouldn't expect you to tell the story all the way back to 2008 where Hisao was frozen in carbonite to keep him alive alongside Meiko who later adopted him... Actually, please forget that train of thought. An...

But that's exactly the way I described it, isn't it? They have finals at the end of the trimester.
I probably wouldn't have commented on it, but you did have the summer holidays start the very next paragraph - it doesn't get much more end-term than that

Well, I never went to school in Japan, but in the Persona games (both 3 and 4) there are mid-terms and end-terms (finals) in the first and second trimesters. First Mid-terms around the middle of May, First end-terms end of July, second mid terms in October, second finals in December. Of course there...

I know mid-terms are tough but seeing the faces of some of these guys… Shouldn't the "mid-terms" be towards the middle of the trimester as opposed to the end of it ? Also, Rika would probably have her mid- and end-terms as the same time as Hisao. ...,but she’s a good person really, wouldn’t look af...

...functionally, this is still Hisao....This is very specifically a point-of-divergence fanfiction, the very first of which is his diagnosis. The question I asked was what about your character is the same as Hisao. If the answer to that quesition is "the name" then you haven't written a divergence ...