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Seems accurate enough - at the very least it's better researched than most stories here.
Nice to see this still continues, though I wouldn't mind to see a bit more of Saki...

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The story is still in a format I consider unreadable, so no feedback on the contents of the story from me yet.

Not much else happening in this chapter to comment on... I do want to apologize for that. I enjoy the occasional filler, but I'm going to try to keep it to a minimum. That was not supposed to be criticism. Your chapters are short. If you tried to fill every single one of them with action or amazing...

so I definitely don't want to dawn a sweatervest, "To don a sweatervest?" Would be possible but I'd only use that verb for stuff like armour or dresses. The steam from the shower flows into my room as I step through the open door connecting the two No such door. The showers are across the hall. dif...

That's why I always recommend writing two or three chapters ahead of what you post...

I posted something about spacing in dialogue earlier on in this thread, but recently I went into a bit more detail on the topic and on formatting in general in a PM, and after asking the other party for permission here is the content of that PM. Hope it helps. *** First of all paragraphs are there t...

I pushed content pretty quickly while writing Act 1 and, while it was fun to do, it was also a little stressful and lacked some of the depth that I wanted it to have initially. I always tried to be two or three chapters ahead with my writing than with what I posted here. Sometimes you realize you'v...

And another story returns from an extended hiatus... The writing is still good, though the pacing of the current chapter seemed a bit slower than for the previous one. One thing that I find disturbing is the continued use of the term "monster" for one's fellow students. In the series the girls were ...

Jake Zero wrote:Good luck with that. Mirage is the king of all Grammar Nazis.

Only because it seems to be appreciated here by most authors.

So you're ending act 1 on the day before the festival... Well, it's certainly a novel idea, and it really is a fitting place for it. Aside form the "being scared in the dark" bit being a bit cliché I liked the chapter very much. A few minor typos: as she draws her slinder fingers "slender" I lock my...

Well, I really like this story, but the number of views is not really an indication of the quality of the story.
It is an indication of how often something is posted in the thread.

I decided to respect Lilly’s wishes of wanting to meet my parents under friendlier circumstances, so I haven’t told them about my girlfriend yet. Here's where tense really becomes important. Since he's still talking about the time he was at the hospital, this sentence absolutely has to be past perf...

So Emi did happen :-) I was wondering about that, since you made no mention of her at all so far. She doesn't seem to very happy to see me. be That seems to have did the trick. done her demeanor changes into a happy, carefree girl. into that of a happy, carefree girl. None if it sounds any better No...

I've sent you a PM regarding paragraphs and another for some grammar corrections. A few comments about the story itself: The Natsume in Chapter 2 is completely different from the Natsume in Chapter 1. Not sure if that's intentional, but it's really strange. "Third floor," She responds back as we app...

I don't know how to say this really, but I have no idea on how to format a story properly. I just spaced sentences out where it feels natural and try to create a gap when the setting changes. Any helpful links you could give on proper story formatting in the setting of a fanfic? Well, as I said you...