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Well... Yes, there is another fanfiction where Emi collides with Iwanako and sends her to the hospital. Problem is in THAT story Iwanako has arrythmia and not a traffic accident. Traffic accidents don't give you a heart disease... And you again lifted several parts of the scene right from the VN. As...

Stories are not static - they evolve as you write them. That's not bad - in fact it's a good thing. It means that you are willing to reconsider ideas that seemed good at the time and throw them out if you have better ones. However you should make it a habit to read over the changed version of the st...

I'm sorry to say that I don't share Oddball's relatively positive assessment of the story. Yes, the grammar is all over the place with tenses, narrative voice and even Iwanako's gender switching every few paragraphs and sometimes within one and the same, but that's not the biggest problem. That is t...

Vielen Dank für das Lob.
Wenn du uns sagst, wo noch Tippfehler sind, werden wir sie bereinigen.

Truth be told, my aversion to horror probably affected my theme choices for stories

...says the one responsible for the best horror stories on these forums...

Finally caught up with all the new stories after getting back from my vacation... Seriously, you go away for two weeks, and when you get back everyone and their uncle has published new stories... I'm not complaining. Getting the technical stuff out of the way first: even as a vien near her hairline ...

Do these additions help? Of course the real Nurse wouldn't do this, but this is a 500 year kitsune Nurse, he's not human and has seen humanity do more shit to each other than anyone should. He hides a much deeper darkness and he's not letting this shitty new brat make his precious little protégé sa...

Nice save
Though now Rin is a bit ooc, but that's okay - she always is

Even though it's only his first appearance, I already like Chishiki more than Nomiya. Even though he puts the same kind of pressure on her... True, but it's meant for the best possible reasons. We know more about Rin than the characters do, so we know how she feels about her art but that's not some...

Okay, first of all I'm not a fan of gore stories in general and of zombie stories in particular, so the first part didn't appeal to me at all. The second part was better, but there are some problems regarding it's connections to the first part: For one thing it is quite unusual for RPG players to pl...

Lots of small mistakes this time - a couple examples from the first part: Emi approaches me as I’m sit at a bench. Maybe she makes [] sense than she usually does. I walk a few steps before I few a tug on my shirt. Mostly they are not even real mistakes but rather sloppy copy-pasting... Nice to see a...

Mirage wrote:Long hiatus. Might be a record - so far...

And you broke it yourself... I hypothesize that you only took so long to do just that

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Are you going to continue this story or did you just drop by to resolve this cliffhanger?

I'm not quite sure how this is supposed to be a redo of your other story. So far there don't seem to be any fairytale creatures around, and it seems to be set quite a bit in the future of the other one. I know I often complain about too much exposition in the first chapters of some stories - e.g. wh...

I decided to use this different script-like style to see how it would go, but I could eventually turn it into prose. I'm not sure what you mean... This is not script style; it's limited omniscient narration. I agree that anyone not really familiar with Japanese folklore will have some serious googl...

Did anyone of you actually read Life of Pi before you dropped the reference in the VN?

Because I recently came across some excerpts, and somehow I think Hanako might not be a fan of the graphic violence in there...