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“Tsu teaches 3rd year literature and I teach 3rd year physics, so our rooms are relatively close together.”

Minor nitpick: If they teach the same class they will also teach in the same room.

Otherwise nothing I can add to QS's assessment.

Hisao's reply letter Probably the most mature reply to Iwanako's letter I have read in any route, including the original VN. Though she would probably appreciate being adressed by her correct name "Iwan a ko"... The confrontation between Misaki and Shizune that morning, and its fallout had been fro...

“I think we got enough exercise yesterday however.” If they continue doing stuff there should be a few precautions to be taken. I'm surprised nurse didn't mentioned any of that... I do hope you don't intend to throw a pregnancy into the story for added drama... Edit: Already taken care of it seems....

Okay... I wonder how he managed to fake medical records. That's probably a crime in Japan as well, and It's very likely nurse will notice - especially after the conversation from the last day...

So when there's two lines of Chisato saying something, then Mitsuru saying something, because those were the last two characters referenced, the subsequent lines are the two of them going back and forth until someone else pops in. So far I haven't had any difficulties distinguishing the speakers in...

I agree, that last chapter was almost completely without tense problems - and other SpaG problems as well. Did you take time to go over it before posting? If so you should keep the habit. Remember when I told you the thing about Rika almost passing out on her way down into town was over the top? Now...

“Same,” I look at her, and could can not help but smile. Her cheeks were are flush, but the slight smile there made makes it all worthwhile. Still quite a fe past tenses slipping in. This is an example with three in one line. Surprises me a little since the rest of your SpaG is really good... I’m n...

For those who were still wondering what my Sig is referring to...

So I seem to have missed the last update, so here the comments for the previous chapters as well. - Still quite a few instances of past tense. Not going to list them all. - Still a few instances of "counsel" After we finish our drinks, we head back to campus Didn't he go to the Shanghai because he w...

"Gods!" is just another general exclamation signifying astonishment - like "Geez", "Man" or "Wow".

You don't need to be polytheistic - or even religious - to use it. I've used the German equivalent multiple times, and I'm atheist.

and the two of them compliment each other perfectly. I guess they might be doing that also, but I think you were going for "complement" a radiant floral pattern definitely giving her an almost regal air. 8) I didn’t get a chance to have breakfast today.” And apparently no lunch either, since the su...

Rin? Is that you?

Nemz wrote:Decent enough start, but you'll have to actually develop some sort of plot to keep me interested.

At least now we know where he got the idea for the title of his next story

“Hello,” comes a girl ' s voice from the door and breaks my concentration. Still a bit clunky... I could hear the two girls giggling. can Rika slaps her closed parasol across our path, and looks decidedly to the right. Turning to follow her gaze, we are witness to Emi, once again running through th...

Very nice story, but [insert my usual reaction to the vertigo running gag]. :-) All characters are spot on, though I especially liked Misha's interior monologue ("I’m Misha. It’s so hard being Misha!")... Somehow it reminded me of some god wearing an elephant mask (not sure how many people will know...