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Well, not telling Lilly about his condition is one of the surefire ways to get the Kenji end...

I've gone through the scripts of Act 4 and the word "foster" does not appear there. The word "parents" appears ten times; neither implies any kind of foster care.
I've had a look at that "source" and what they are talking about is definitely not the beta version of KS.
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Okay, finished the rest of it. Wasn't as much as it seemed to be left. So first of all let me say that you shouldn't worry about similarities with MTTB too much. If you hadn't mentioned it was your inspiration I would not have gotten the idea myself. Both your Iwanako and all secondary characters ar...

The beta says she was raised by foster parents; I'm going by her beta backstory, because that's more defined.

I've been an editor for the Beta, and I can assure you there is no different backstory for Hanako in there.

Wow, what a wall of text... You know the worst thing about forums is that you don't really get to use bookmarks, so usually I prefer smaller batches :-) Still so far (it will be some time until I'm fully caught up) I like what I see. Don't worry about using the same basic idea as another story. Ther...

“Excuse me, are you Hanako?” Seems strange that someone who is in her year would have to ask that... Rin and Hisao looked thoroughly confused at this statement This should be Emi and Hisao, right? “When you put us both together, we have all of our limbs.” Again lines taken verbatim from the VN... m...

Called it :-) Misha stopped as she claimed a spot in line for she and Hanako for herself and Hanako “Umm… m-maybe, the loser has to do something, s-something really embarrassing!” Hanako suggested. Who is this girl, and what has she done to Hanako? (I could have made that comment at several points.....

Okay, a couple of things (I'll mostly skip over typos and missing commas; if you want advice on those send me a PM with your email): There are a few lines where you have Hisao talk in a bit of slang, for example here: "Got a new recipe you wanna try? Gotta be better than what I was bringing." You mi...

I did try to make sure that all of these social situations in Act 2 are ones that pretty much happen to Hanako, as opposed to being instigated by her, with the exception of the Student Council work she committed herself to. I like to think the Misha pairing would make her more sociable, though. Par...

NIce twist at the end. Didn't see that one coming.
Comes at the price of Rin being a bit ooc, but who cares

Uh oh... Hisao seems to be one a one-way trip to the Deep End... Better chapter again - a few very nice Rin lines. It's fun reading about so many of the characters, and you're doing well with the characterization (for most), but with Hanakos circle of friends growing this large, she's starting to be...

Okay... Everything was all fine... Until you brought in Miki... I know there's not much to go on in the VN, but I really had a hard time buying that character even before she broke out the joints. (How do you work out an arm without a hand, and why would you? Emi smoking joints tops the whole ridicu...

Did you work there or do they take visitor submissions?

So, sorry about the hiatus, but over the last year I learned that I'm actually a girl. That has to be one of the more creative excuses for neglecting to continue a story I've seen so far. This's gotta be weird eh, given that the last time we met I was a guy :P Given that I had no idea what your gen...

2. I was going with the idea that, at least where painting with Rin was concerned, I don't see where the scene would be much different (she needed someone to help her with painting). That being said, I understand it's bad writing and plan not to do it again. If you have any suggestions on what to p...