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Not sure where it is popular... This is certainly the first time I heard it on these forums...

Bah! Alright, you win. I'll remove it and find somewhere else to slip it in later. It's definitely going to appear somewhere though. You might have won this battle, but I'm gonna win the meme war! This is not a battle, and the way I see it, if the story improves everyone wins. :-) You know, there a...

...that Rin uses shorter sentences - which evokes a completely different impression than the one I assume you were aiming for. What I meant is that Rin comes across as slightly stupid, since she doesn't seem to be able to form longer sentences in her thoughts... I assumed you were not aiming for di...

We all know what "comfort" means in this context ( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°) Yes, it means "having sex to distract oneself from sorrow." Is that what they are doing here? Because to me it seems more like "having sex bacause of being horny." Inserting jokes and memes into stories can be fun - but only if it's the r...

So in your mind her problem is some kind of Aphasia...
Well, I guess it's within the realm of the possible... But it would have to be some very strange and selective kind of aphasia...

“Please comfort me, Hacchan. Just for tonight.” I see what you did there... Problem is it doesn't fit in that place of your story at all - neither the "comfort" part nor the "just for tonight" one. My first h-scene/sex scene that I've ever written. Hope it was serviceable! I just skimmed over it, b...

Anyway, Rin Chapter. I have a unique perspective on Rin. Tell me what you think. Sorry to say I don't think it's very Rin-like... Your "Inner Rin" is completely logical and even perfectly self-aware. The only way you distinguish her thoughts from Hanako's in the other chapters is that Rin uses shor...

I'm not sure I can help you much... For one thing I haven't seen anything from the Jojo franchise. From what I know I thought it was some kind of Bleach/Naruto/HunterXHunter - style Shounen with more violence??? Maybe I have the wrong impression... The vibes I got from your story so far are more lik...

Yes, i saw Misha's sex scene, and you are right i didn't liked, it felt so wrong...

It was supposed to.

I agree with Oddballs summary... but you could say Shizune has a bad and a realistic ending

Wow, a Mini-Natsume-Route... Not what I would have expected in a one-shot thread:-) I agree with Clacifer that a few passages were a bit too explicit to be realistically shared between people who just met each other not matter the motivation. That and Hisao telling about his attack was too flippant....

Sorry to say my impressions of this story do not really improve with chapter two. You have the introduction of the OC: a foreigner, who arrives and from the start manages to put Shizune in her place. Let's leave aside for the moment the issue that you spilled his whole backstory in one info-dump... ...

As I said, I'm not an expert, but 400GBP sounds a lot more reasonable.

She put an arm around Hanako’s shoulder to steady her and motioned quickly for Lilly to come in, which she did.

Good for her. Usually motioning for Lilly to do something is not really effective.

I have no idea what a Rothkos is, but what you have established in this scene is that he likes to throw money around. I don't claim to be an expert in art and art prices, but Rin has literally never sold a painting before, and he just offered that money without even getting the opinion of an expert....

You know... this whole art thing feels quite forced: "I have to buy a painting as a gift from my trip to Japan." "This girl paints. Want to buy one of hers?" "Sure, I'll pay two months of a regular person's salary for this painting of a Japanese schoolgirl." "But isn't it supposed to be a gift from ...