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Probably another April Fools joke...

He's from Australia. They're always a bit early about everything.
Man, it must have been hard to manually override the spellchecker all the time

It is usually considered polite to ask the author of a story for permission before hijacking his thread for a continuation of his own story - especially when the original story is not finished yet...

For example: I could hear them whispering; 'did you hear that?', 'go check it out', 'pass me the gun'. If you're talking with a friend and tell them about a conversation, you usually wouldn't use direct speech but indirect speech like this: "I could hear them whispering. One of them asked the other ...

"You're free to go, though I would advise avoiding any sort of head trauma for a few days." I'd advise him to avoid head trauma in general. ;-) How come they are all in the music room half an hour after class started? It sounds a bit strange that he racounts the events of the burglary using direct ...

You're switching between tenses a few times, other than that nothing to complain about.
Oh, and you're missing nurse and Saki from your cast list.

Also I think I mentioned this before, and it is largely irrelevant, but here it is with a bit more permanence. If someone is impaled by something, pulling it out is a great way to make them bleed out. Take it from someone who knows someone who worked as a paramedic for a number of years. A teacher ...

A few things: - Saki's skills as a card dealer are impressive - especially given her condition... - "Half an hour later"? One round of Poker lasts two minutes tops. Hisao has to be clothed like a frickin Eskimo to last so long... - Hisao's room is on the second floor. He doesn't need to go up to the...

Looking back so far, me as myself is OOC in some places. Wut. Not only yourself - Hanako as well. She's beeing stared at from point blank range by some guy she doesn't even know and all she does is blush? That's panic attack material. Then Misha signing a letter with "love" after knowing a guy for ...

Actually, this is exactly how I imagined Jigoro's character to be if we'd gotten to know him better in the VN.

Because this is the internet?

Tenses.
Keep to one of them.

It's true, Hicchan. Besides, don't you want to spend time with us after school, Guids?"

If you rip the text, at least change the names
Still not very much in terms of deviation from the original plot - just substitutions of one thing for another.

Shouldn't It be obvious? The Political Term of "Adult Content" is anything that is shown that is something that has sex, nudity, and Ridiculous Violence that should not be viewed by children. Source": http://en.wiktionary.org/wiki/adult_content. "should not be viewed by children" is another thing t...