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You're off to a good start. Nice job of creating the setting. Reminds me of Crest of the Stars a bit...
So far we don't know where you're going to take it - could become anything from military to romance. We'll just have to see...

Beautiful story.
No idea what else to say...

Andonymos wrote:

Mirage_GSM wrote:I think this is one of the best Rin pov stories I've ever read... Not that there are very many but still!

Y-you too.

Yeah, why?

I think those were the best ones yet.
They also capture the essence of Haiku best. There is more to it than just counting syllables...

One word: Tenses!!!

Also, you spend a very long paragraph explaining the thougt that went into Hisao's decision to take over the council, saying he thougt about it all day, and for the rest of the chapterhe insists it was a spur of the moment decision...

At least she didn't blame it on the weatherman. Poor guy has it rough as it is 8) I think this is one of the best Rin pov stories I've ever read... Not that there are very many but still! And I've said it before, but in my opinion KS has exactly one neutral ending - Hanako's chess ending. The one th...

Regarding links - it is a nice bonus for those who come late to a story and are not interested in the comments. I fall in neither category, so I don't really need them. Also, they are probably only relevant if you expect the story to go on for more than half a dozen chapters. And as for including th...

I can't help but think that Lilly has an unfair advantage in english tests...
But nevertheless, I enjoyed this little story very much.

@zeldas:
Has been thougt of, asked about and answered many times in the past.
Is also addressed in the FAQ.

No, there won't be any sequel.

Six seconds off his personal best on a 100m dash? You know that's an awful lot, don't you?

Also: "gum uniform"

Actually, the Japanese R sounds very much like an L.
They have much more trouble pronouncing an actual R-sound.

My thoughts exactly. And not only doesn't Hisao tear up the letter in a rage, he actually accepts the blame, telling her she's perfect...
Forget the bitch already.

One more thAn when he puts his cell phone away.
And he tells his daughter twice when Shizune will be home.
Three or four more typos but nothing serious.
Looking forward to further chapters.

Rin should get drunk more often! Funniest part of the chapter.
Hokkaido has quite a few notable tourist attractions, but Lilly's house seems to be in the middle of nowhere, so probably not much to do except nature walks...

Yep, or they haven't looked in the right places. I'll leave you to decide which category you fall into, with the reminder to you that KS is the product of a 4chan discussion... Well, you probably can find good discussions there, but after spending the better part of half an hour there and finding n...