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You spelled a lot more than just names wrong - up to and including "Liar" ...even these injuries heal. Excluding the eye of course. Two months of coma followed by... probably another three of rehabilitation - Hisao will probably have to repeat his last year. Anyway, it probably would have been bette...

“My my,” Lilly starts. “I never thought she would be that embarrassed over a bra…”
I don’t think I should tell her how lacey it was. “I think it was meant for Hisao’s eyes only.”

Shouldn't Lilly be able to feel that?

While you can speak sign-language spelling out every single letter, that is something Shizune probably wouldn't do. It's more or less for beginners.

Hope you don't go in too many directions at once with this...

Interesting concept. I'd like to read more of that, but it's probably good to leave it there.
Good job.

griffon8 wrote:Very evocative bit here. Is this based on some anime? Wikipedia shows no relevant hits from what I see.

My wikipedia trip turned up this.
Haven't read it myself yet, but it's on my To-Read-List (which is too long for me to get to it anytime soon...)

Oh, and nice to see you back as well mocaw!

I don't see any problems with X-rays at Yamaku. They're not exactly rocket science nowadays.

And I am improving if what Mirage was saying is correct.

Oh yes, your writing stly has improved considerably. Your first story here had run-on sentnces that went on for up to ten lines. You managed to curb that habit nicely.

Whoa, heavy... I actually had to concentrate reading this. Definitely not the light reading common here. The Pink Lady to the left of Misha kind of appealed to him, but it was rather like admiring the architecture of a computer. If you didn’t have access codes and authorizations, and were unlikely t...

I don't know where you live, but in Japan, I've been to places where there's nothing else on the menu... If you have a menu in a restaurant, roughly a third of the courses consist of raw fish of one kind or the other. I wasn't able to live in Japan for three months (and not even particularly close t...

“I don't have much experience with fresh seafood,” he admits, looking a little bewildered, “most of what I've had was from a can or out of a freezer.”

Wair... Hisao didn't grow up in Japan?

he stands along side me...

"Alongside" should be one word.

She was forced to kill her warrior?

Another OC who is a walking textbook on various medical conditions.
I understand if some people want to give their OCs more than one condition to make them more interesting, but four???

I remember about Kenji dating Miki and working in a bar she owns in another fic before. Intentional reference or coincidence? Rin, the awkward and talented artist who I could never quite understand. I'm always on the fence about whether or not to point this out, because, come on, whoever uses "whom"...

Why should we comment here if the story's not even posted here?

Something I've come across while translating:

[Grammar] - Emi III - Up, Down and Up Again

"Neither of us, however, are prepared for this sudden new sensation."

Should be "is prepared"