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Also an interesting start - and this time there's going to be more...

almost the exact same situation as we were in just over twenty minutes ago.

Those few lines of conversation took an awful lot of time...

helping him plan the Final Stroke against the Illuminati.

...Apparently it is possible to use "stroke" in this context. I just never encountered it before.

Miya was a short young woman, about a year younger then us.

Well, I guess being exposed to too many VNs can lead to gross misconceptions...

Dude, the map above it's pretty much everything you need.

Brown University is where some of the photos were taken, but it's not Yamaku.
Brown has almost 10.000 students, while Yamaku hosts about 12 classes of maybe 20 people, so 300 students at most - probably less.

Shizune shook her head, “To answer the first, she did some telepathic scans from a distance.” “She spied on me?” “She's a ninja, what do you expect? Somehow I find her spying on her teammates and then putting the info in the daily memo hilarious. fifty thousand dead, many more injured, billions of ...

...the touch is nowhere near the feeling of his but, but it's close...

Nowhere near, but close, huh?

I noticed one more:

I scowl at people who pass by me, making sure they keep there distance.

...plus the new guy asking questions about one of the other students might throw up questions as to why he's asking... "She's my cousin" should be an adequate answer to those questions... And even if he doesn't want to divulge that information, there are plenty of innocuous ways of asking for her n...

The detective decided that we should get some sleep before being interviewed, and it was decided that we should sleep together in case I did something stupid. Who decided that? The detective? The school? Nurse? With what reasoning? "That guy just went through a terrible experience - let's set him u...

Well, so far it's okay. You made your OC a girl magnet again, but I won't even complain about that anymore... I wonder why he goes about finding his long lost relative in the most roundabout way imaginable. He could just go to someone (Mutou, Misha or any of his classmates) and ask them "Hey, I'm lo...

I thought what I meant was obvious, but now I'm not so sure anymore... It's not that she mightn't like shoes or that buying shoes is "gay" or anything. It's just - how do you buy shoes when the one who's supposed to wear them is not present to try them on? Odds are they have to return them because t...

Walrusfella wrote:Upon thinking about it some more, I realised that her advantage, fitness, might actually be a liability in an isolated survival situation. Since her body's a highly efficient machine she'd need a lot of calories per day just to stay alive.

Citation needed.

Having nine characters all in one place makes writing a story like this very difficult. Tell me about it... Something om his look tells me... I think you meant to type "in" “A competitive game we can all participate in,” Misha replies, which sounds rehearsed. She even holds up a finger as she finis...

"Miss Mikado, I would appreciate it if you would reframe from such causal contact." I think you meant "refrain". At the beginning I was a bit confused about how much time has passed since the last chapter. You might try to make that a bit more clear as well as at least a short summary of what happe...