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...if I was looking for a woman who wouldn't be a good mother, I would not be married to this woman.

Why would anyone explicitly look for a woman who wouldn't be a good mother?

Interesting - not quite as depressing as Doomish at his worst but pretty bleak all the same.
At the rate people are dieing here the zone will probably be empty in three days tops.
Stalker reference?

So now they've saved Hanako they won't even try to find a cure for that other guy?

Well, let's say I've located the joke, but either I do not understand all of it or I don't find it funny...

Actually, saying "I've done my part" is taking Shizune's side, but I can see how she would be offended anyway

I see how incisive she signs. I think you mean "decisive". I am wasn't sure of which one to use in that sentence I went with incisive because technically Shizune is "talking". That word, I feel, conveys the right emotion.. Apparently there is an alternate meaning for the word "incisive"... I've nev...

I was a bit confused, because it seems you have rewritten about half of the story so far... For the most part, I like the changes. There are some fresh ideas, and you actually made me LIKE Shizune - that's something not many authors have managed to do ;-) Some of the dialogue sounds a bit stilted, b...

It doesn't really happen all that often that I literally facepalm while reading a fanfiction, but... There was enough proof to at least partly confirm that I'd found who I was looking for, but I wanted it to be a bit more concrete and the only way I could think about doing that is to do another sket...

I always prefer reading stories with OCs - if done right they have MUCH more potential for originality.
Just try to avoid Mary Sues...

"Eachother" is not a word.
Happened two times in the most recent chapter, so I thought I'd let you know.
Other than that - nice to see a chapter without so much gloom for a change!

I think you managed to borrow a familiar scene from the game without it feeling too much like a cut-and-paste, and Misha's loudness being an actual, real problem for your protagonist is interesting. I mostly agree, but I still wish 3-3 wasn't always the dump for new students. The first contacts wil...

Hmm... Your "Interlude" gave me an idea for a short One-shot.
I'll see if I have time to write it down...

Your writing is definitely improving, but I think you overdo it when you seperate scenes. /////////// Is the equivalent of slamming a book shut and searching for the page again. Also think about whether you actually need some of those separations at all. As a rule of thumb, if there is no timeskip (...

Very good chapter. I don't think I read about Hisao being told off in this way concerning his behaviour towards Iwanako before.
I also agree that it was better for her not to have read the letter.

Can't find the citation right now, but I think I remember one of the devs confirming there were 4 classes in third year.