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"irgendwann" auf jeden Fall.
Zur Zeit kann ich aber keine Zusagen über den Termin machen...

Daww, I would have loved to play with Hanako in the snow...

Where's the problem?
He comes to Yamaku in June, graduation is End of March.
Plenty of time to make snow angels in January and February. (Might be very close to the finals though...)

You shouldn't skip any part of the experience, go through Episode 1-26, then 'Death and Rebirth' if only for the beautiful ending credits, then 'End Of Evangelion'. It's... very mind-altering. The only thing that's mind-altering about NGE is the stuff the director had sniffed when he made the last ...

So... He fell down and while he blinked someone fixed his prosthetic for him? Without him noticing?

That friend of hers must be a very... unique person.

Yes, she must be unique, if she would say the same things he was saying ^^°

And who sent him the running prosthetics? Those are expensive...

Why is Miki trying to kill Hisao? She does know he has a heart condition, doesn't she?

Oh, and you slipped into past tense a few times towards the beginning.

OtakuNinja wrote:Mike Weee, you're a genius!

Fixed that for you.
Not that Mike's work is not amazing, too: He did #2 which is probably my favourite this year.

Interesting development...
If I had to nitpick, I'd say you should have introduced Ryou a bit more detailed if you want to make his relationship with Sumi a central plot point.

Yes, definitely an improvement

No.
First of all, people who don't know Avatar won't get anything out of your story anyway.
And secondly technically detailed explanations would be weird if you later reveal it's a dream. You don't give detailed explanations in dreams.

It probably doesn't make much sense if you haven't seen Avatar (and I'm not talking about the Pocahontas movie with the blue space indians).

In fact, he showed very little to either direction

Is that supposed to mean something like "It was hard to tell either way"?

Agree, the first chapter is defnitely better than the prologue.
I'm a bit surprised HIsao already woke up. Let's see what you have in store for us next...

Well, it's like comrade said: Iwanako hasn't seen Hisao in about three months, yet she somehow knows exactly what to say to him. Also, though it is a one shot, some parts feel extremely rushed, for example: "Please come with me!" My resolve was firm. I had to do this. "Okay. Hey Kenji, I'll cut this...

"But even if it wasn't being subjected to some kind of force, eventually the concrete would break down, as everything in the universe breaks down. It's entropy." "To reduce the entropy in something, you have to put in energy. Are you going to put in energy, HIsao?" Sadly, this is actually a common ...

The first few lines of the letter read a bit like a suicide note.
Aside from that it's a nice story.

1) Maybe. Still if it was about a friend of me, I'd still be concerned until I was sure about that. 2) Why should it be about Hisao? It's pretty obvious it's about Rin, though. 3) Partial agreement. Pushing would indeed be unhelpful. Offering not so much. He did offer, though, even if without that m...