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Oh I also need to comment about "Lilly being portrayed in a better light here than KS". I don't think she was portrayed in a bad light in KS. Some people took it like that, but only because they did not feel their own (Hisao's) mistakes. I mean come on, she loves the guy but everybody else will be ...

I have to admit that I'm not too fond of reading fanfictions that simply retell the original story from another PoV. It can be an interesting experiment for a scene or two but not for a whole path. Especially since the purpose of this one seems to be to portray Lilly in a more positive light than sh...

Grammar is mostly okay with a few tenses out of place here and there. Like you said your OC seems a bit Mary Sueish, but so far it's not too bad. You might keep it in mind when you continue, though. The only thing that worries me so far is his split personality. I can see how writing something like ...

It really dpends on the group of people. I have two groups of friends, and while in one group, hugs are the default way of saying hello and goodbye, in the other group I am on "hugging terms" with only two or three people.
Kissing as a greeting is a bit less common still.

LegyPlegy wrote: And rodents.... And small mammals.

So... rodents and small mammals, huh?

Xanatos wrote:

Hisao&Hanako<3 wrote:I consider it ignorant.

Neither sarcasm, cockiness, nor humor in any way suggests a lack of knowledge. Do you know what "ignorant" means?

Maybe he's using his own definition of "ignorant" rather than the arbitrary dictionary one...

So by the definition of the word, Emi is not a slut. The dictionary's definition of the word, perhaps. But being bound up by some book's definitions is rather arbitrary. Just ask anyone who has ever said "ain't" or used slang only to be bitchslapped by a Webster fanatic. :lol: She's not a slut by t...

Is Emi a slut? slut (noun): A sexually promiscuous woman or girl. (sexuallyy) promiscious (adjective): Indiscriminate in choice of sexual partners. So... Is Emi indiscriminate in her choice of sexual partners? Even if we assume she had sex with her previous boyfriend, there is no indication anywhere...

Somehow I have the feeling this is supposed to be Akira, but the age difference is a bit... Well, anyway there are a few things you could improve in your writing, but for now your biggest problem by far are tenses: You switch between past and present more often than Doctor Who in an average season, ...

In Rin's path all the choices up to the one in the atelier at the end of Act III are pure flavour and do not influence the ending at all.

Seriously, the last time a story like that appeared on the forum, the thread was shut down within hours. I'm not sure if banning did occur, but it's possible.
So I don't know if continuing this discussion and reposting the link over and over is the most wise decision...

You know you don't need to start a new post every few paragraphs. The forum has shown to be able to handle a lot more.
Also: Another story with choice points...

the only reason their dead and not me is because of these two.”

Notice anything strange?

Also, I want to ask suriko, if he and 4LS is okay with my idea of using their layout/style also their charachters and backgrounds to programme this VN. 3. You may not alter the game, nor make your own derivative work that builds on it. Specifically, we have a dislike for reverse engineering the gam...

Well, there is at least one interview with Suriko out there. He did that together with Crud before the release of KS. Was more of a panel presentation with Q&A afterwards. I think Aura did a chat Q&A at some point, but I might misremember that and it was one of the other devs. As for the artists, I ...