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Well, Parkinson is not really a disease that younger people get. For a teenager to be afflicted with it is extremely unusual...
Still he doesn't seem so handicapped by it yet that it would neccessitate him going to Yamaku.

if I’m ever told to report to the principles’ office. I'm not sure if Yamaku has an office of principles. If so Shizune would probably occupy it. The principal might have an office in the administrative building, though. ;-) it collides with me with what I image is the force of a run away freight t...

Fun fact: In the novel Misha doesn't use the -chan suffix for anyone but Shizune and Hisao. She calls everyone else by their normal names: Emi, Lilly, Hanako - not sure at the moment if she ever talks to Rin - even Hideaki. She calls Jigoro "Mr. Shicchan's father" once though. Still whenever Misha m...

I guess dorm-neighbours have to be a little insane at Yamaku ^_^

Very good chapter and an interesting new character. I wonder how she gets along with Lilly...

I admit when you said you'd posted a draft and I saw just how much of a draft you'd posted, I was scared. It wasN't really that bad, though. A few Their/they're mixups and similar stuff, missing apostrophes, a few missing words - otherwise it was mostly okay. Shizune and Misha are obviously Mars and...

New student? Check.
Foreigner? Check.
Rich? Check.

Apart from the rather cliché premise there's not much to complain about, though. Writing is solid just like characterization.
Let's wait to see what you do with the story...

Well, I don't start google everytime I don't know some slang term, so some univerally understandable warning might be practical. The intention of a warning is that your audience should understand it after all. If I don't want visitors to enter the room where I keep my pet anaconda I don't write the ...

I was hoping there would be some kind of point to the story... Oh, and if you wanted to warn people about the story, you should have used keywords like "Violence", "Gore" or "Rape". I'm still not sure what you mean by "Trigger". I reach for the phone on my bedside unit, and dial. The phone rings for...

The biggest thing that many people should know is that cities in Japan generally are very large in comparison to US cities.

You do realize that doesn't make any sense, don't you?

naxxar wrote:... plus the forum needs more yuri

Well, it has been some time since Kosher left...

The Blade Runner reference was obvious, so I didn't for one moment interpret this dream as prescient in any way.
If you're unfamiliar with the title "Do androids dream of electric sheep?" - or even with the movie - I can see how this dream would seem strange, though.

Well, this reads a lot better now. Good job fixing stuff this quickly.
This is the second Deus Ex crossover here. Not surprising given the nature of KS.

For now let me just say that I think Emi would be the very last person to trade augmentations for a lifetime addiction to drugs..

Maybe this one?

I'm sorry, I gave up about four lines into reading this. I have no idea a) which parts are supposed to be direct speech and which aren't and even more importantly b) who is doing the talking in each line! Correct use of punctuation for the English language is: "Direct speech," narration, "direct spe...

Are there any quotes that felt a little off to you?

Mainly the Yakuza stuff, but I admit it's more a mix of kenjiish and rinnish

I'm still debating the possibility of a bad end,

Don't.