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Seen the Grisaja anime... Well, the first one anyway.
If the story is even a little like the VN then you shouldn't expect too much.

Sad one, but good one, too.

Well... I think I wrote all I cared to write about this story the first time around.
The story hasn't gotten any better with age...

Nice...
But in the end Lilly still avoided the question how she knew it was Suzu...

If it turns into a pseudo-harem story where he's trying to manage all the female attention without any of the dating options trying to kill the others, I certainly wouldn't complain.

Don't worry. I would.

NIce to see you back! Your writing has improved a lot since the last time. Regarding the story... Well, it's WAY too early to say anything about that. I assume the shredding of the notes was an attempt at self-induced amnesia - what I don't understand after what nurse told her was how it was so succ...

So, one thing I always complain about in cases like this is when people heap several unrelated disabilities on the same person. Yes, it does happen in real life, but it always feels forced in fiction. Some other things are a bit hard to believe as well, e.g. why should her parents discuss the decisi...

Short and very to the point. I like it. Nice work!

You should probably remove that link and the reference to that project if you don't want to get banned...

Well, the save was gone, but I still have the preset with the characters.
I've used that for a couple more games in the meantime, but I didn't write diary for those.

That comic is good... but also sad...

It's also kind of jarring to see that entire year of Hisao's life skimmed over in the space of 2 chapters paragraphs. I don't usually comment on stuff that didn't make it in the published version, but this is kind of funny, because in the original draft it was two sentences instead of two paragraph...

Well... I honestly can't remember having read this one before. I probably did, I just did a good job forgetting about it.
And now you have to drag it back into the light...

I generally don't like stories that are written solely for the shock effect, and even among those this is one of the worse ones.

I read up to the point where you started to use script format.
Quite a few grammar mistakes up to there but otherwise okay.

Caption:
"No, my voice is just a bit hoarse today. By the way, you were paying for the strawberry parfait, right?"

The issue comes more in the choice of meter and rhyming scheme. In the English-speaking world, iambic pentameter is most directly related to Shakespeare. However, Shakespeare used blank verse in iambic pentameter because it most closely resembled the natural cadence of spoken English. Interesting, ...